Talk:Charles Dinsmoor/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:40, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

• The Rambling Man Thanks for taking.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:48, 15 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• Infobox header says "Frederick dinsmoor".

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:14, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "a nineteenth-century American" no need for century (that's a given based on his birth/death) and no need to link American.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:14, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "to the bar" link.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:14, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• Could put some geographical context in the lead.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "Ireland but are from" were?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "1834.[1] Dinsmoor's family genealogy.." His family...

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• I think his "ancestors" sentence belongs with these sentences.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "arrive in America, John Dinsmoor. John came to America" repetitive.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "from Londonderry, Ireland and" comma after Ireland.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "governor of New Hampshire"" link?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "Congress" link?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• " Samuel Dinsmoor, Jr." these no longer use commas.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "New England" link.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• Elk Township, Warren County, Pennsylvania has an article.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "became a student" where? How?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:39, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "... business for about eleven years in the same cities. The printing he did while teaching and attending school" merge.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:39, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "During the last three of this time he" years? And "of this time" is awkward phrasing.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:39, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "and was in that" -> "and held that"

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:53, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "he was twenty-two years old." do you mean he started a year-long course when he was 22?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:26, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "admitted to the bar of " link.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:26, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "assistant United States marshal" what does this mean? Is there a link?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:35, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "1860 census" link?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:35, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "Dinsmoor has been" Dinsmoor was?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:35, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• Link Oddfellows.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:35, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "his health failed. The last five years of his life he had failing health " bit repetitive again, suggest a reword to merge to avoid the repeat.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:18, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• " (b. 10/17/1867)" write out in prose.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:18, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• Link "patent No".

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:18, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• " of Stockton, California in" comma after Cali.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:18, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "after the subject of this article" not how we write things.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:18, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• Ref 9, en-dash in the year range in the title.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:18, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "1886" is not a helpful caption.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:18, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

That's all I have so it's on hold for now. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 21:39, 15 March 2021 (UTC)

Thanks for review. I'll start on the issues tomorrow.--Doug Coldwell (talk)

@The Rambling Man: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:18, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

Ok, I made a few tweaks. Passing. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 08:22, 17 March 2021 (UTC)