Talk:Chak De! India/GA1
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Hi, I am reviewing this article for GA and have entered my comments below. It is a wonderful article, and all of my comments regard minor points that will be easy to fix. —Mattisse (Talk) 20:39, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
- "(who was likewise accused of throwing a match against Pakistan during the 1982 Asian Games)" - haven't mentioned the fictional character's having done this yet.
- "It was also reported as influential when the Indian Hockey Federation was suspended in April, 2008." - clumsy - Its influence was again emphasized when... or some other wording you like.
- memsaab - should not have external links in the body of an article.
- "He acted as the coach and trainer for the cast..." confusing, as it first it seems like you mean he was playing the role.
- "cast because they are actual hockey players.' - probably best to say "were" because they were at the time, but as for the indefinite future, when this article is read, they will not always be hockey players.
- The section "Chak De girls", be consistent in using the period rules - using no period for incomplete sentences, period for complete ones.
- Consistency needed with dates: either dmy or mdy (probably dmy for India). Also, the dates should be delinked. I can run a script to do that once the dates are consistent.
- "Further reading" should go below "Notes" per WP:LAYOUT
- Under "Notes" and "Further reading", none of the titles should be in all caps.
Meanwhile, I shall put the article on hold. —Mattisse (Talk) 20:39, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
Thanks Matisse. I made the changes and have noted what I did below each request. Please let me know what else needs to be done. Regards, -Classicfilms (talk) 22:28, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
- "(who was likewise accused of throwing a match against Pakistan during the 1982 Asian Games)" - haven't mentioned the fictional character's having done this yet.
- I deleted this phrase because it is non-essential and the sentence still works without it.
- "It was also reported as influential when the Indian Hockey Federation was suspended in April, 2008." - clumsy - Its influence was again emphasized when... or some other wording you like.
- I changed it to: "The film's influence was emphasized when..."
- Changed again to: "The suspension of the Indian Hockey Federation in April, 2008 emphasized the film's influence" which is a better sentence. -Classicfilms (talk) 22:47, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
- memsaab - should not have external links in the body of an article.
- I removed the link.
- "He acted as the coach and trainer for the cast..." confusing, as it first it seems like you mean he was playing the role.
- Changed to: " Negi coached the cast stating..."
- "cast because they are actual hockey players.' - probably best to say "were" because they were at the time, but as for the indefinite future, when this article is read, they will not always be hockey players.
- Changed to "were..."
- The section "Chak De girls", be consistent in using the period rules - using no period for incomplete sentences, period for complete ones.
- I made a few changes here - adding "is" and "from" in addition to your suggestion above. Take a look and see if it is consistent.
- Consistency needed with dates: either dmy or mdy (probably dmy for India). Also, the dates should be delinked. I can run a script to do that once the dates are consistent.
- Ok, take a look. I went through and found every date that needed to be changed to dmy and did so. If I missed any let me know. And yes, please run the script for any dates which I did not delink (I did most but not all).
- "Further reading" should go below "Notes" per WP:LAYOUT
- Done.
- Under "Notes" and "Further reading", none of the titles should be in all caps.
- Done - I think. Please take a look and see if I missed anything.
- I can't figure out why the record title/ singers don't line up. —Mattisse (Talk) 23:26, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): well written b (MoS): Follows MoS
- a (prose): well written b (MoS): Follows MoS
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): Well referenced b (citations to reliable sources): Reliable sources c (OR):
- a (references): Well referenced b (citations to reliable sources): Reliable sources c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): Sets context b (focused): Remains focused on subject of article
- a (major aspects): Sets context b (focused): Remains focused on subject of article
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias: NPOV
- Fair representation without bias: NPOV
- It is stable.
- No edit wars etc.:
- No edit wars etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Wonderful article. Congratulations! —Mattisse (Talk) 23:26, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
Thank you! -Classicfilms (talk) 23:34, 19 January 2009 (UTC)