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Reviewer: Enwebb (talk · contribs) 20:01, 22 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I'm willing to review this article. Full disclosure, this is my first attempt at a GA review, so I hope I can do your article justice.

Thank you for taking on the review. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 04:58, 23 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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  • Good job at explaining concepts in-text
  • I really like the images found to accompany the article
Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:52, 23 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Inconsistent use of Oxford comma (no use here: "The adult worm has a scolex, or head, a short neck and a strobila, or segmented body formed of proglottids" but used in the following sentence: "Tapeworms anchor themselves to the inside of the intestine of their host using their scolex, which typically has hooks, suckers, or both.")
Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:52, 23 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Their bodies consist of many similar units, known as proglottids, which are essentially packages of eggs and which are regularly shed into the environment to infect other organisms." this can be simplified so that "which" is only necessary once.
    • I see that cirrus is later linked in the reproduction section, though it should be linked at the first occurrence instead per MOS:BUILD
  • taxobox is missing authority
  • "Nerves emanate from the ganglion to supply the general body muscular and sensory ending" should "ending" be plural there?
  • inconsistent usage of whether you refer to the subject in-text as cestodes or tapeworms
  • I do, but in the lead you've established that the word "tapeworm" means the subclass Eucestoda ("The best-known species, in the subclass Eucestoda, are ribbonlike worms as adults, known as tapeworms.") I just wanted to make sure that it was intentional that every time you used "tapeworm" you were referring specifically to that subclass. If that isn't what you mean, maybe you could add to the lede that all members of this class are colloquially called tapeworms, while the Eucestoda are the true tapeworms. This appears to be the distinction you're already making in the reproduction section (tapeworm=Cestoda, true tapeworm=Eucestoda).
  • Hmm, let's go with "Cestoda", "tapeworms and their allies", or just "worms" for the whole class, "Eucestoda" or "tapeworms" for the subclass. It matches the anatomy much better. I've tweaked the article accordingly. Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:35, 23 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Once anchored to the host's intestinal wall, tapeworms absorb nutrients through their surface as the food being digested by the host flows past it." this sentence seems a little clunky—could be rewritten to be more concise.
    • the following sentence again seems a little wordy "Cestodes are unable to synthesise lipids and are entirely dependent on their host, although lipids are not used as an energy reserve, but for reproduction"—I'd recommend "Cestodes are unable to synthesise lipids, which they use for reproduction, and are therefore entirely dependent on their hosts."
  • As written, it appears that the reproduction section only refers to the true tapeworms. A more complete coverage would also include the other subclass.
  • "This animal then becomes an intermediate host, the oncosphere bores through the gut wall and migrates to other parts of the body such as the muscle" comma splice
  • "These are the infective stage" pronoun/noun disagreement, should be stages
  • For the internal phylogeny, it is unclear which sources are the basis for the phylogeny and the information about intermediate and definitive hosts
Repeated the refs for clarity. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:57, 23 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Beef tapeworm/Taenia saginata is overlinked; so is definitive host
  • You could include more information on how cestodes impact their hosts. Are there lethal or sublethal effects? Perhaps you could rename the "Host immunity" section to "Host response" and include more information on this.
  • Thanks. I've added a paragraph on time and transmission strategies to the lifecycle section, indicating the very long timescales involved. Tapeworms don't kill their hosts at all quickly. Chiswick Chap (talk) 10:20, 23 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ref error (Cite error: The named reference Cheng was invoked but never defined)
  • Fixed.
  • Good job! The article meets the Good Article Criteria. I hope you feel I did a good job reviewing your article; let me know if there are ways I can improve in GA reviews in the future. Enwebb (talk) 17:56, 23 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]
@Enwebb: Thank you for the review. What you did seems fine and you mentioned that the article meets the Good Article Criteria. I can't tell if you checked for copyvios or looked at the licensing of the images, and you may find it helpful to use one of the templates that list the criteria, and then you can tick them off individually. It's up to you. You can get some good hints too by looking at reviews being undertaken by other experienced reviewers. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:30, 23 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]
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