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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 12:01, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]


Will do this shortly. JAGUAR  12:01, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments

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  • "The county is mainly rural with large parts being hill or mountain land" - how about hilly? Feel free to ignore this if you don't like it
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • The third paragraph of the lead is lacking links. Try linking silver, zinc, or EU
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "More recently, the population has started rising again as elderly people move into the county for a peaceful retirement" - not sure if 'peaceful retirement' sounds informal to use here, I would just rephrase to for retirement
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Cardiganshire had a substantial population in the early modern period" - why the use of 'Cardiganshire' now? I've seen Ceredigion been used throughout the rest of the article
The word "Ceredigion" refers to a historic kingdom and to the present county (since 1996). At all other times, the county was known as Cardiganshire. I have edited the article to tried to rationalise this. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Another factor was that the great landed estates of the county, which for so long had dominated the politics of the count" - I don't understand this
Rephrased to clarify. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "the British Government realised" - I don't think 'government' needs to be capitalised
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The River Teifi is a renowned salmon fishing river" - link River Teifi
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "A bus service known as "Bwcabus" operates in the south of the county offering customised transport to rural dwellers" - 'dwellers' refer to people, so "transporting to people" sounds a bit wrong. Should this be either dwellings (rural houses) or transport for rural dwellers?
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ref 14 redirects to the main page
Not sure about this, which reference do you mean? Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
The toolserver picked up that ref 14 was a redirect, but I've checked it myself and it should be OK. Might be an error on the toolserver's part. JAGUAR  14:04, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Nor this. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Disambiguation links. I check for them in every review, and didn't find any here JAGUAR  14:04, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Excellent work with this article! I enjoyed reading it. I found a couple of things that confused me, but once all of the above are clarified then this should be good to go. JAGUAR  12:22, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking on this review. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:35, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for addressing them, with all of the issues clarified this looks good to go now. JAGUAR  14:04, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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