Talk:Central Park (Burnaby)

Starting the Talk page

Heyaheyaheyaheya. This is our project Talk page. Bleh blough blim.

PeteLambert (talk) 19:20, 3 March 2015 (UTC)

Invasives

I split up the Invasive Species section in two, one for animals and one for plants. That way it will be easy to contrast and related what invasive animals are doing to native animals and ditto for plants. Please edit if it doesn't look good to you. --PeteLambert (talk) 20:54, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

Businesses

Deleted this section -- I couldnt find any businesses in the park PeteLambert (talk) 04:57, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Impacts of Tourism

I deleted this section as I couldnt think of anything to put in it. We're covering ecological impacts under ecology. I'm sure there are impacts but I'm not sure what exactly. If we can get some info for it we can put it back in. --PeteLambert (talk) 06:22, 10 March 2015 (UTC)

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Peer Reviews

Peer Review by Lacee Smith This is a great start, the article is written in very informational tone and is non-biased. Some phrasing things didn't seem to fit for me such as "as homes were being built and businesses set up shop." in the "History" section. "Set up shop" I think is a little too slang for an encyclopedia article. You could possibly rephrase it by saying "as homes and business were being built". In the same section I think that the word "centennial" could be one that you put a link into just for fun! The "Trails and Hiking" section I think could be rewritten in a more organized form. I think it would be good to have the trail name in italics and then less wordy description of it such as follows:

The Terry Fox Trail is 5 km long and the most well known and used trail. It's route circles around the upper pond and just reaches the lower pond. Visitors often use this trail for physical activity purposes and it is annually used for the Terry Fox Run for the City of Burnaby.

with the other trails following. Is there a name for the 1.9 km trail?

The "Facilities" section is a bit grammatically messy. The different facilities listed in your beginning sentence don't need to be capitalized also the phrase "Earl and Jennie Lohn Perennial Garden" seems misplaced and you also refer to it again directly below.

In the section "Animal Life" you have the phrase "viewed from the birdge by the golf shop" do you mean "bridge"? Otherwise I like how concisely written this section is, informative and straight forward. In the "invasive species" part of this section you have the word "fitness" which I think would be a good one to add a link to it's wiki page to because it can be an ambiguous term. Also below you have "Invasive Plant Species" and I think it would be good to have the under the animal section "Invasive Animal Species" as to stay consistent.

That is all, great job so far, also I think that once the table of contents is added in, it will look pretty complete! Lacee Smith Lazershea (talk) 19:43, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

Comments by Rosie: ````

• Excellent advice, thanks very much.

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Peer Review by David Wu After reading this wiki page, the first impression here is interesting. The park is very famous as a place where local residence relax themselves and enjoy their spare times. The routes and ways how people get there is labeled very neatly and in detail, this is one of the good feature where people will be interested to look at when reading your wiki page. However, it would be nice if you put a map of this park at this section. This will improve the utility of this section by so much. On the other hand, the history of the park can be in more detail. For example if there is any big events or reconstruction took place in this park and has a record at the government.

In the Ecology Section, everything is fine. To improve this section, it would be really helpful if you go to the park and take more pictures of the environment around. Though it might be hard to capture pictures of invasive species or animals, taking pictures of the ecosystem around can give us a more clear vision of this place too.

This wiki page is very interesting and neat, there are only a few minor mistakes that should be changed, and keep up the good work my friend!

Wu David20101993 (talk) 16:23, 13 March 2015 (UTC)

206.87.158.57 (talk) 18:15, 17 March 2015 (UTC) Reflection

Comments by Rosie: ````

• I see they've already taken your advice about the photos.

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Good tips Lacee and David... thanks! --PeteLambert (talk) 06:53, 15 March 2015 (UTC)

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Peer Review By Taylor Keraiff

This page is very detailed and is a very good draft. Can you find a map of where about the park is? Which direction do you have to walk from Metrotown to get to it? When did the Whitecaps move from practicing on that field? I find your ecology section quite impressive. The only thing I would add would be images of the invasive plants along with the invasive animals. Also, just to ass images of the park in general. I would make sure that I have the Central Park Burnaby page linked everywhere it is mentioned in other pages as well. Your hyperlinking and citing was done well, and I like that you put in italics of what you are going to add. I recommend linking Terry Fox Trail (or at least Terry Fox), Central Park New York, and possibly phytoplankton and zooplankton? Are there any major hisotrical events that happen at the Park? You could add these in, as well as hyperlink them to their Wikipedia pages. Other than that, great draft!! Please be sure that all your spelling and grammar are correct and that the subheadings are also in the right format. Taylorkeraiff (talk) 23:36, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

Comments by Rosie: ````

• Very helpful.

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Peer Review By Dylan

The page is detail and well laid out. You may want to add some kind of map or something to locate the Park try using maps I think this might be useful. You may also want to make sure that all the relevant wikipedia pages to other locations have links in the article like Swangard Stadium and the New York Central Park. The amount of references that you have included is great but you need to make sure that they are formatted properly as well. I found this page very helpful. It would also be good to go though and make sure that all of the heading are the correct size and have correct spacing. The page is very good. TheSunDanceKid19 (talk) 05:03, 25 March 2015 (UTC)

Comments by Rosie: ````

• Thanks for the map-finding advice and the link to the referencing help page.

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Followup from Peer Reviews

Thanks for the tips guys!

A lot of the stuff you've already done, David. I went through all the suggestions above and followed through on what was left. The only question I see remaining is how to fit a map into the Location section. 3 people told us its a good idea, but there isn't much room.

Thoughts? — Preceding unsigned comment added by PeteLambert (talk • contribs) 20:34, 9 April 2015 (UTC)

Feedback from Ruth and Rosie

This is a very good draft, though we would ahve appreciated an explanation of how it will be integrated with the existing material.

• The link to New York City's Central Park is unnecessary.
• 'circuitous' probably isn't the word you want to describe the trails, since their goal isn't to get you to a destination. Maybe 'meandering'?
• You should at least be able to provide a simple map showing where the park is located.*If you can't provide a map of the park, at least tell the reader that maps are available on the Burnaby.ca page (provide a link).
• The Facilities section shouldn't describe the geographical locations of facilities unless this is accompanied by a map. Otherwise just say that these facilities exist, without saying where they are.
• Clarify that the shops and homes were built in the surrounding neighbourhood, not in the park.
• General information on what invasive species are is not needed, since you give a link to the invasive species page.
• Be sure to clean up the Table of Contents in the final version, and to have an Intro section above it.
• Do you describe the size of the park? At least say that it's a very large urban park.