Talk:Caught in a Moment/GA1

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 14:21, 7 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Info box/Lead

Mayfair Strongroom Metropolis → Is this how it's written in the booklet? No 'Recordings Studios'?
- Yeah Till 04:17, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Caught in a Moment" is a song by English girl group Sugababes, released as the fourth and final single from their third studio album Three (2003). → "Caught in a Moment" is a song recorded by English girl group Sugababesfor their third studio album Three (2003). It was released as the albums fourth and final single.
- I don't really like this :/ Till 04:17, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - Too much is going on too quick, just keep it simple. Say which album it is from first, then say it was released as a single. As a track is always a song first before it is a single. — AARON • ^TALK 09:26, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    - Done Till 09:56, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
song is downtempo → song is a downtempo
- Done Till 04:17, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
It is reminiscent of the group's ballads "Stronger" and "Too Lost in You", → Why? Could sound a bit bias.
- Removed Till 04:17, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Upon release, the song became → Following its release, "Caught in a Moment" became
- Done Till 04:17, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Background and release

During 2003, the Sugababes began working on their third studio album Three (2003), in which they wrote and recorded material while they travelled around the world and performed on tours such as the Liverpool Summer Pops. → This isn't working. During 2003 implies all of 2003, and you can't begin something for the duration of the year. Suggest changing to: In 2003, the Sugababes started to record songs for their third studio album, Three (2003). They wrote and recorded material in various countries around the world as they performed at various musical events such as the Liverpool Summer Pops.
- Done Till 04:17, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The album's fourth and final single, → As the album's fourth and final single,
- Wrote something similar Till 04:17, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Composition and lyrics

produced in a similar vein to the → and its production is similar to the
- Done Till 04:17, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
According to the digital sheet music published by Hal Leonard Publishing, → Useless info
- I believe there is a requirement to cite these things Till 04:17, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - It's not, I've never included it since I was told not to include it. — AARON • ^TALK 09:26, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    - Removed Till 09:56, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
It was compared to the works of girl groups All Saints and Massive Attack. → Massive Attack is also a girl group?
- No, fixed Till 04:17, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I made some changes to this section.

Chart performance

on 26 August 2004 issue → on the 26 August 2004 issue
- Done Till 04:17, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Live performances

In regard to → With regard to
- Done Till 04:17, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Credits and personnel

The personnel bit really needs to be two columns, it's far to long a list.
- It used to be like this but was really ugly and bulky. I think it looks better as a long list Till 04:17, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - It looks uglier and bulkier as one really long list. — AARON • ^TALK 09:26, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    - Not really. Till 09:56, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
      - It does, it would look a lot better if it were two columns. Articles which have credits with a fifth of this amount have two columns. — AARON • ^TALK 16:00, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
        Done Till 11:48, 10 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Status

On hold. — AARON • ^TALK 14:41, 7 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed everything thanks. Till 11:48, 10 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Passing.

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