Talk:Catatonia (band)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 12:22, 22 April 2016 (UTC)

Will review this a bit later. I am the mob!♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:31, 22 April 2016 (UTC)

Lede

• " The band formed in 1992 after Mark Roberts met Cerys Matthews; the duo went on to have a relationship during the band's initial work, breaking up as they worked on their second studio album. " -seems a bit trivial for the lede. I'd trim it.

• Done. Miyagawa (talk) 14:05, 23 April 2016 (UTC)

• "The first major lineup featured Dafydd Ieuan on drums, Clancy Pegg on keyboard, Owen Powell on guitar and Paul Jones on bass. This line-up recorded two EPs, For Tinkerbell and Hooked." -you can avoid repeating "this line-up" and replace with "They"

• Done. Miyagawa (talk) 14:05, 23 April 2016 (UTC)

• "This new line-up remained for the rest of the lifetime of the band. The single "You've Got a Lot to Answer For" received radio airplay and became the band's first top 40 single in the UK Singles Chart." -when?

• Added - also to the article body too. Miyagawa (talk) 14:05, 23 April 2016 (UTC)

• "Their breakout success came with the International Velvet album and the release of the single "Mulder and Scully". The album went to number one in the album chart, and sold more than 900,000 copies being certified triple platinum by British Phonographic Industry, while the single reached number 3 in the singles chart, the highest any Catatonia single would chart." -again dates would be good

• Done. Miyagawa (talk) 14:05, 23 April 2016 (UTC)

• "The follow-up release, "Road Rage", reached number 5, and was nominated for best song at the Brit Awards and the Ivor Novello Awards, winning at the Q Awards. The titular track from the album International Velvet received additional attention, and the band performed it at the opening of the opening ceremony of the 1999 Rugby World Cup in the Millennium Stadium in Cardiff. While in Catatonia, Matthews collaborated with Space on "The Ballad of Tom Jones" and with Tom Jones on a cover of "Baby, It's Cold Outside". Their final top ten single came with "Dead from the Waist Down" off the following album, Equally Cursed and Blessed. " -and again

• Done. Miyagawa (talk) 14:05, 23 April 2016 (UTC)

• "The tour to support Paper Scissors Stone was cancelled, and shortly after the band dismissed the break-up rumours. However, a month later, the band announced that they were breaking up." -superfluous, try "The tour to support Paper Scissors Stone was cancelled, and a month later, the band announced that they were breaking up".

• Done. Miyagawa (talk) 14:05, 23 April 2016 (UTC)

• "the supergroup The Stand " -what makes them a "supergroup"?

• I've added a link to Supergroup (music) - it was meant as a descriptive term rather than a compliment. Miyagawa (talk) 14:05, 23 April 2016 (UTC)

• " The writing duties were shared across the band, and dismissed the label of an indie band, with Powell saying they had only ever sought to write pop music." -doesn't make sense,. New sentence "They disagreed with being labelled an indie band.."

• Done. Miyagawa (talk) 14:05, 23 April 2016 (UTC)

History

• "They hit it off", encyclopedic?

• Dropped. Miyagawa (talk) 14:05, 23 April 2016 (UTC)

The Crai

• On wiki I believe we don't add the "th" on 19th and 20th Februsry

• Corrected. Miyagawa (talk) 14:05, 23 April 2016 (UTC)

• Link " Cnapan Festival"?

• Added a redlink for now - I double checked and the modern title is Cnapan Music Festival. Although in doing so I found out that Cnapan is a type of medieval Welsh football, which I didn't know before. Miyagawa (talk) 14:05, 23 April 2016 (UTC)

Equally cursed

• "In April, they played their largest Welsh based gigs outdoors at the Llangollen International Pavilion in front of 6,000 people on two successive days. This was a warm up to their largest concert so far, held at Margam Country Park near Port Talbot. " -confusing, which was their largest concert? Can you reword for clarity?

• That shouldn't have had largest twice - I've edited it, so it should be clearer now. Miyagawa (talk) 14:05, 23 April 2016 (UTC)

• "Catatonia supported R.E.M. on two European dates around the same time as the single "Londinium" was released; t" -when was this?

• I've clarified. Miyagawa (talk) 14:05, 23 April 2016 (UTC)

This is a considerable effort overall, really informative, though I do think the prose needs some work to avoid sounding like a magazine in places. It's good enough for GA, but might benefit from a further vigorous copyedit. ♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:25, 23 April 2016 (UTC)

• Thanks for reviewing. This was one of those articles I'd always intended to get around to working on but if it wasn't for Awaken the Dragon, I have no idea when that might have happened. Miyagawa (talk) 14:05, 23 April 2016 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail: ♦ Dr. Blofeld 15:07, 23 April 2016 (UTC)