Talk:Cartman's Mom Is a Dirty Slut/GA1

GA Review

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Hello. I'll be reviewing this article. Check out Talk:I Married Marge/GA1 for how I'm going to be organizing this. Let's start. The Flash ^{talk} 00:44, 20 October 2009 (UTC)

Lead

• ""Cartman's Mom Is a Dirty Slut" is the 13th and finale episode of South Park's first season, it first aired[...]" -> "[...]first season. It first[...]"
• "He discovers that his father is most likely a man, his mother[...]" -> "[...]a man his mother[...]"
• Wikilink to David A. Goodman
• "The episode met with positive responses[...]" -> "[...]was met with positive[...]"

Plot

• Can you make the transition from Kenny, Kyle, and Stan filming Cartman to Cartman wondering about his father flow better?
• Wikilink to Denver Broncos

Production

• I'm not liking the quality of File:Jay Leno (1993) by Alan Light.jpg - be better to replace it with File:JayLeno.jpg or {{double image|right|TreyParker-2007.jpg|130|David A. Goodman by Gage Skidmore.jpg|130|[[Trey Parker]] (left) and [[David A. Goodman]] (right) wrote "Cartman's Mom Is a Dirty Slut".}}
• Wikilink to David A. Goodman, once more
• It would be better just to put a section called "References," with the book, and make the current one "notes" - then make all book references simply Weinstock
• I quite confused with the wording for the guest appearance. It doesn't flow well. Can you clear it up and explain why Clooney's appearance is important.
• "[...]the song used at "The Drunken Barn Dance", Walters was romantically[...]" -> "[...]"The Drunken Barn Dance." Walters was[...]"
• "However, instead of continueing the episode's[...]" -> "of continuing"

Theme

• "Thus confirming a theory by Paul Cantor[...]" -> "This confirmed[...]"

Release and reception

• "[...]the United States on cable television channel Comedy Central[...]" -> "[...]on the cable television channel[...]"
• Move the complete week marathon ratings to before the Canada info.
  • This seems more logic to me, as the episode was broadcast before the average could be computed.--Music26/11 11:29, 22 October 2009 (UTC)
• Season two's best episodes? Don't you mean season one?
• "In a top ten, compiled by Chicago Tribune reporter Allan Johnson, regarding South Park's best episodes[...]" -> "In a top ten list of South Park episode[...]"

Images

• Just that one I mentioned in Production. The Flash ^{talk} 00:44, 20 October 2009 (UTC)

Final say

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   Nice work. I've gone ahead and passed it - thanks for taking care of my issues :) The Flash ^{talk} 21:59, 22 October 2009 (UTC)

• Took care of the issues you pointed out.--Music26/11 11:35, 22 October 2009 (UTC)