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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:35, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
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- Just noticed, you use "episode" four times in four sentences in the opening para, which is a bit jarring.
- "outside of the " literally no need for "of".
- Done though some Americans use it Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
- "1.16 million" non-breaking space here.
- "by Chill Wills" citation?
- That's sourced from the end credits so no citation needed. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
- Plot -> merge six short paras into three medium paras.
This necessary? Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)- Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:42, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
- "Canadian IDs" explain, were they passports, driving licenses, what?
- Canadian identification cards. No specifics. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
- "on the Sandpiper case" meaningless to most readers.
- "led by the Cousins arrives" unclear.
- "the cold open and" what's that?
- Cold open = scene before title sequence Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
- Link short film.
- Isn't it self-explanatory? It would also make a sea of blue. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
- "the Kettlemans again." The" quotes are normally directly cited.
- Not if the cite is at the end of the next sentence, IIRC. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
- "performed a majority" the majority?
- " double as" link?
- Mando image is crushing the refs on my screen, perhaps add {{clear}} before the ref section?
- "little bit." Nonetheless" ditto on direct quotes/ref.
- See above. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
That's it. It's a good piece of work. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 17:05, 12 May 2022 (UTC)