Talk:Carli Lloyd/GA1

GA Review

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Buffbills7701 (talk · contribs) 03:11, 21 February 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Unreferenced statements

• "During her senior year, she scored 26 goals and served eight assists..."

• Added. Hmlarson (talk) 00:27, 22 February 2014 (UTC)

• "During the league's inaugural season, she started in 14 of her 16 appearances for Chicago playing a total of 1,313 minutes on the pitch."

• Added. Hmlarson (talk) 00:27, 22 February 2014 (UTC)

• "The Flash finished first during the regular season with a 10–8–4 record and advanced to the playoffs."

• Added. Hmlarson (talk) 00:27, 22 February 2014 (UTC)

• "Lloyd represented the United States at the under-21 level before making the jump to the senior team at the age of 23. During the first round of the 2003 Nordic Cup, she served the assist in the U.S.' 1–0 win against Denmark. At the 2004 Nordic Cup, she scored two goals and served one assist while starting in every match."

• Added. Hmlarson (talk) 00:27, 22 February 2014 (UTC)

• "...she played in 15 matches for the United States in 2010, starting 14."

• Added. Hmlarson (talk) 00:27, 22 February 2014 (UTC)

• "At the 2011 FIFA Women's World Cup, Lloyd scored the final goal in a 3–0 win against Colombia for her first World Cup goal. Throughout the tournament, she tallied two assists, one goal, and one successful penalty kick in the shootout against Brazil to send the U.S. to the semifinals vs. France."

• Edited and added references. Hmlarson (talk) 00:27, 22 February 2014 (UTC)

• "This game was highly anticipated and viewed as revenge for the U.S. as they had lost to Mexico, 2–1 to qualify for the World Cup."

• Edited and added references. Hmlarson (talk) 00:27, 22 February 2014 (UTC)

• "Lloyd has an endorsement deal with Nike."

• Edited and added reference. Hmlarson (talk) 00:27, 22 February 2014 (UTC)

Other

• "Lloyd had become a regular in the midfield." Don't think this is good grammar.

• Removed. Hmlarson (talk) 00:39, 22 February 2014 (UTC)

• "The game was uncoordinated for much of the first half despite the U.S. being a goal ahead." Opinion.

• Edited. Hmlarson (talk) 00:39, 22 February 2014 (UTC)

• One deadlink. Not GA criteria, but still, you might want to fix it.

• Subbed new ref. Hmlarson (talk) 00:39, 22 February 2014 (UTC)

Verdict

• I'm going to put the article on hold for a week. Best of luck! buffbills7701 03:11, 21 February 2014 (UTC)

• @Buffbills7701: Thanks for taking the time to do the review. I've made updates to the article in response to the issues you spotted. Hmlarson (talk) 00:42, 22 February 2014 (UTC)

Great job. It passes. buffbills7701 03:05, 22 February 2014 (UTC)