Talk:Cane Beds, Arizona/GA1

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Reviewer: An anonymous username, not my real name (talk · contribs) 00:37, 16 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

It looks very good already. My only critiques are these:

The Name section should be changed to Etymology and moved to the top, as is standard for any article.

The second comma seems to be unnecessary in "St. George, Utah, metropolitan area."

"In Cane Beds, there are pronghorns and mule deer, and there is land suitable for agriculture." Something about the wording of this feels awkward and it could probably use elaboration anyway, as it's its own paragraph.

The story about the nurse's accident in Tourism feels overly lengthy given the section's size. Rather than shorten it, I suggest seeing if any other information about tourism can be found to make the section longer overall to balance it a little.

There might be details about the trails themselves, but I've done about as much searching for information as not living in the area allows. Would be appropriate to remove some of the details of the nurse's accident (perhaps to be more equal with the coverage of the similar accident?) - of course, it is the subject of a lot of the news coverage mentioning the town. Kingsif (talk) 21:15, 16 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Calling someone without a WP article a "notable resident" seems like bit of a stretch, even more so when you specify that they only lived there briefly.

Notable for the town, I think, but removed. Kingsif (talk) 21:15, 16 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hmm, I think it's fine as it is after your revisions. Excellent job. --An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 01:59, 17 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]