Talk:Candyman (Christina Aguilera song)/GA3

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 08:24, 12 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Single artwork needs an alt description Done
, taken from the second disc of her fifth studio album, → for her fifth studio album, Done
produced by Perry → produced by the latter. Done
released on in February → Typo Done
and lyrically speaks about → with lyrics about Done
Each paragraph of the lead starts with "Candyman", and the latter two "Candyman received" Done
deemed it one of the outstanding tracks → deemed it to be one of the best tracks Done
of Back to Basics while → comma after Basics Done
"Candyman" received a Grammy Award nomination for Best Female Pop Vocal Performance at the 2008 ceremony. → This should come after the video, but before the tour. Done
and covered by → and has been covered by Done
was written by Aguilera and Linda Perry, → was written by Christina Aguilera and Linda Perry, Done
the director. → musical director? Done
"Candyman" was described by Aguilera herself as a tribute to The Andrews Sisters' 1941 song "Boogie Woogie Bugle Boy".[ → You said this in the previous paragraph. To be honest, I think the recording para of the previous para would be better worked into this section. Done
Stylus Magazine's Thomas Inskeep opines that "Candyman" imitates swing music,[19] while Joan Anderman from The Boston Globe commented that → You flicked from present tense to past. Done
imitates swing music → Does make it a Swing song, so remove from lead and info box Done
attempted to modernize early 20th century pop and blues → attempts to modernize pop and blues doesn't make it a pop or blues song, so remove from the lead and info box. And the source doesn't link this song to these genres explicitly either. Done
Jazz is in the lead and the info box but not sourced anywhere, so that needs removing to. Done
Only include a genre if a critic says "the X track", "it is a X song" etc. Done
According to the music sheet on Musicnotes.com published by Universal Music Publishing Group → Boring, remove. Done
"Candyman" was composed → Present tense? Done
The song is a midtempo song, with a moderate tempo → Repetitive Done
while describing its lyrics as "dumb and cheekily vulgar" → More suited to composition section? Done
cited it as one of the few "pop-song highs" in Aguilera's career → Here is your source for Pop. Done
Alt needed for music video pic and live performance pic Done
which went to → but lost to Done
was positive toward the performance → Too puffy Done

Outcome

Looking at the previous failed GANs, looks like you've worked hard to amend all of those issues. On hold for 7 days. — Calvin999 09:40, 12 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Calvin999: All done. So fast and furious! Simon (talk) 10:01, 12 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Still issues with the genres.

For swing, the source says "a faux-swing track that’s really just a stylistic mish-mash". Faux means false, so it's not really a swing song.
For pop and blues, the source says "The pair evidently set out to contemporize classic pop and blues of the '20s, '30s, and '40s, but wound up aping the Andrews Sisters (and ripping off ``Boogie Woogie Bugle Boy") on ``Candyman,". It does explicitly say that "Candyman" itself is a blues track, or any of the tracks for that matter.

So, blues need to be omitted from the lead because it's misleading. And you've still got jazz in the lead, which is unsourced altogether. — Calvin999 10:07, 12 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Calvin999: How does it look now? Simon (talk) 10:16, 12 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, passing. — Calvin999 10:26, 12 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]