Talk:Candyman (Christina Aguilera song)/GA2
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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 06:46, 29 July 2014 (UTC)
- Lead
- "recorded by American recording artist Christina Aguilera, on her fifth studio album, Back to Basics (2006)"..... from Back to Basics.
- "peaking within the top 20 of most countries"..... let's give some specific names of countries here
- "Aguilera performed the track on a number of shows"..... provide the names of shows
- "covered on several occasions"..... include who covered it
- Background and release
- The first four sentences of the first paragraph belong in the Back to Basic album page, not here. The rest of the paragraph belongs in "Composition"
- "was purchased on iTunes"..... released
- "It was also available as a maxi single there on September 1, 2007"..... released as
- This section may as well simply be "Release" due to its "background" info relying on album background rather than song background
- Composition
- "At the beginning, the lyrics are" → "The song opens with the lyrics"
- "He's a one-stop shop/ Makes the panties drop"..... needs space between "shop" and "/"
- Per WP:OVERCITE, a ref doesn't need to be used more than once in a row per paragraph, so remove the first instance of ref#27 (Rolling Stone)
- Critical reception
- "criticized the song's lyrics for being too sexual"..... a bit too long, try "criticized the song's sexual lyrics" or "criticized the song's sexual content"
- More WP:OVERCITE of ref#27
- I find it interesting how Jenny Eliscu both praised the song AND found it to be a possible rip-off Andrews Sisters' "Boogie Woogie Bugle Boy". Looking into the ref, she doesn't definitively call it a rip-off (uses the word may), so let's replace "She also called 'Candyman' 'a dead rip-off'" with "though suggested it might be 'a dead rip-off'"
- Remove "on it" from "but praised Aguilera's vocals on it"
- Work source for Sean Daly's review is missing
- For some reason, ref#33 is listed as "Yahoo" yet links to an About.com review from Bill Lamb, which is unreliable per WP:ALBUM/SOURCES.
- Work source for Stephen Thomas Erlewine's review is missing
- Include the name of the reviewer from The Guardian
- BMI (ref#37) supports an award for "Ain't No Other Man", but not this track
- Chart performance
- Music Canada (ref#45) is dead
- RIANZ (ref#61) is dead
- Music video
- More WP:OVERCITE with ref#62 (MTV)
- "PopCrush" (ref#65) is unreliable
- Remove the comma after "John Montgomery for MTV News"
- Let's make note that Justin Timberlake's "What Goes Around... Comes Around" won the VMA award.
- Live performances and covers
- I'm skeptical about London Evening Standard (ref#68)
- More WP:OVERCITE of ref#69
- "The performance was supported by dancers"..... included dancers
- "jazz legends" is borderline POV, try "jazz artists"
- ref#71 (IMDb) is unreliable
- ref#72 (NME) links to the site's main homepage
- Link Back to Basics Tour after "The song was later performed during the worldwide" instead of in the photo caption
- ref#75 (RCA Records) is dead
- ref#76 (Daily Mail) is unreliable
- Remove the comma after "series" in "American TV series, Glee"
- "The version was well received by critics"..... The Glee cover
- I'm skeptical about TVLine (ref#79)
- "X Factor (Poland)" should link to X Factor (Polish TV series)
- Credits and personnel
- "Source:"..... not very fitting, you can just say that credits were from album booklet
- Charts and certifications
- ref#89 (RIANZ) is dead
- Release history
- The "label" section of the table needs to be closed off
- References
- MTV News should not be italicized in ref#1
- "Wenner Media" should link to Jann Wenner in ref#2
- See note on ref#1 regarding ref's #5 and #7
- Publisher for Amazon.com (all languages) is Capital Group Companies in ref's #8 through #11
- iTunes Store should not be italicized in ref's #13, #14, #15, #16, and #17
- See note above on ref#'s 8 through 11 sources regarding ref#'s 18 through #20
- Publisher for The Boston Globe (ref#22) is Richard H. Gilman
- Remove "PopWatch" from ref#23 (Entertainment Weekly)
- AllMusic should not be italicized in ref#26, and "Thomas Erlewine, Stephen" should read "Erlewine, Stephen Thomas"
- Accessdate for ref#28 (Billboard) is missing, unless the URL to this cannot be found
- Sputnikmusic should not be italicized in ref#29
- IGN should not be italicized in ref#31
- Ref#34 (BBC Music) should not be italicized in ref#34 and read BBC, publisher is British Broadcasting Company
- Publisher for The Guardian (ref#35) is Guardian Media Group
- Publisher for The New York Times (ref#36) is Arthur Ochs Sulzberger, Jr.
- UK Singles Chart should not be italicized in ref#46
- Remove "swisscharts.com" from "Christina Aguilera – Candyman – swisscharts.com" in ref#48, and
- ARIA Charts should not be italicized in ref#60
- See note on ref#1 regarding ref#66
- MTV should not be italicized in ref#67
- In ref#69, "MTV UK" should read MTV
- See note on ref#1 regarding ref#70
- Digital Spy should not be italicized in ref#77
- "Buzz Media" should link to Spin Media in ref#78
- ref#89 (Record Industry Association of New Zealand) should read "RIANZ" to match other refs
- "Mega Single Top 100" should not be italicized in ref#90
- "Swiss Singles Chart" should not be italicized in ref#91
- See note on ref#46 regarding ref#92
- "Ultratop & Hung Medien / hitparade.ch." should just read "Ultratop & Hung Medien" in ref#93
- ref#95 is missing its work/publisher fields
I'm really sorry, but the issues with prose and references are simply too extensive. Failing this as a result.