Talk:Canajoharie Creek/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 03:05, 18 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

1. Prose ✓ Pass

2. Verifiability ✓ Pass

3. Depth of Coverage ✓ Pass

4. Neutral ✓ Pass

5. Stable ✓ Pass

6. Illustrations ✓ Pass

7. Miscellaneous ✓ Pass

Comments

1.

Wikilink Mohawk language in the lead
If Cherry Valley (village), New York is the Village of Cherry Valley mentioned in the article, it should be linked
"Tekoharawa" and "Tekaharawa" - Are these incidentally similar names or is one a typo?
Link Sprout Brook, New York
"Mc Ewan Road" - I can't read the details on the map that clearly, is there suppose to be a space in the name?
"Village of Canajoharie" and Mohawk River - It's generally considered acceptable to link in the first place in the lead and in the first place in the main body of prose. Can you link these at the first mention in the main body of prose?
"Hendrick Schrembling, and" - Drop the comma
"In 1750, Schrembling sold his property to his business partner, Marte Janse Van Alstyne." - Just need the last name, since Van Alstyne is mentioned in the preceeding sentence
The Village of Ames is a duplink
"The road to Otsego Lake was used by General Clinton's American army in 1779." - Give Clinton's first name too. Also, use British army. The current usage gives the impression that Clinton lead a USA army, when he was really leading the British army in America
Link Otesgo Lake to Otsego Lake (New York) if that's the same lake
"In July 2017, 13 people were rescued from the creek near the pools located in the creek off Mill Street by the village of Canajoharie. The 13 people were trapped due to a flash flood." - Combine these two sentences
"which is pan of the Beekmantown Group" - Huh? What does pan mean here?
Link the Beekmantown Group
and link the Trenton Group and the Tribes Hill Formation
"maintains two stream gauges along the Canajoharie Creek." - I don't think the "the" is necessary
"in operation since 1993 is located" - Comma after 1993
"McEwan Road" - You have a space between Mc and Ewan earlier. This should be consistent
I don't think brown trout and carp should be capitalized

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"Native name Tekoharawa" - Doesn't seem to be cited anywhere
"In July 2017, 13 people were rescued from the creek near the pools located in the creek off Mill Street by the village of Canajoharie. The 13 people were trapped due to a flash flood.[19][20][21][22]" - Citation overkill. You don't need all four citations to prove this
" It had minimum discharge of .23 cubic feet (0.0065 m3) per second and a gauge height of 1.26 feet (0.38 m) on September 10, 2015. The upper station had a maximum water temperature of 99 °F (37 °C) on July 15, 1995.[25]" - There doesn't seem to be a mention of temperature here
" It had minimum discharge of .23 cubic feet (0.0065 m3) per second and a gauge height of 1.26 feet (0.38 m) on September 10, 2015. The upper station had a maximum water temperature of 99 °F (37 °C) on July 15, 1995.[25]" - Using the graph seems to locate a minimum in the 1990s, not 2015. I don't understand exactly how all these numbers transfer from the graph to the statistics in the text. I couldn't find .23 on the graph for that date either, but that may just be user error. The table for the other gauge makes sense, though. It there a similar table for the first gauge?
Why does "data" appear after most of the refs? I don't think it should be there
In refs where the publisher and the website are the same, only include the publisher
Ref 4 needs a page number, if available and the author
Not sure where a publishing date of 1970 for the usgs website in ref 3 comes from. The interent didn't even exist then
Ref 18 takes me to a very different article
Ref 22 should have the newspaper's name for the publisher
Ref 24 is dead
None of the usgs.gov waterdata pages seem to have actual publishment dates, so go ahead and omit those all
Ref 29 is dead
Ref 31 should have New York Department of Environmental Conservation for the publisher, and drop the website parameter
Ref 32 needs the author
Ref 19 needs the author
Ref 20 needs the author
Ref 21 needs the author
Ref 22 needs the author
Ref 23 needs the author

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The etymology in the lead isn't in the main article. The lead should be a summary, and information in the lead should be in the rest of the article.
You have a native name in the infobox, but not anywhere else. This would be worth mentioning in the article, maybe in an etymology section.

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Placing on hold, gonna need some work. Hog Farm (talk) 17:20, 18 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Hog Farm: I'm pretty sure I have fixed everything. With the General Clinton link, he is an American General, I just had added a link to the wrong General Clinton. Let me know if I missed something. Thanks, 420Traveler (talk) 21:53, 19 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Still some ref work, I'll look it over and go point by point later. Hog Farm (talk) 23:08, 19 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Further comments

Ref 2 - The publisher is New York State Engineer and Surveryor, omit both of the Google books mentions.
Ref 7 - drop the website parameter, as well as the date - 1868 isn't the date the webpage was published
Ref 9 - Drop the authors (Nokia and Microsoft) and drop the Microsoft after Bing Maps
Ref 11 - drop the website, it's the same as the publisher
Ref 14 - drop the website and the word "data"
Ref 19 - The publisher should be "United States Government Printing Office"
Ref 20 - Drop the website, it's the same as the publisher
Ref 21 - same as above
Ref 24 is still dead, it needs replaced either by archiving or finding another source. There's also some formatting errors, but I won't enumerate those because the ref needs replaced

"Limestone and shale of the Trenton Group disconformably overlie dolostone of the upper part of the Beekmantown Group in the river bed of the creek. Rocks in the Canajoharie Creek river bed include the Chuctanunda Creek Dolostone, which is part of the Beekmantown Group, and the disconformably overlying limestone and shale of the Trenton Group. Interbedded limestone and shale of the lower Trenton Group is conformably overlain by the Utica Shale, which is roughly thick at this locality. All rocks of the Trenton Group were deposited during the Trentonian stage of the middle to late Ordovician (circa 448-458 Ma) and the rocks of the Chuctanunda Creek member of the Tribes Hill Formation were deposited during the Gascondian stage of the early Ordovician (circa 505-488 Ma)." is a copy of information in [1] according to Earwig, this needs addressed. It does not appear to be a mirror, based on the nature of the source and the fact that it is only one paragraph within a much larger source. Hog Farm (talk) 01:10, 20 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Hog Farm: I think everything is fixed now, unless I missed something minor or you found something else. Let me know, thanks, 420Traveler (talk) 19:59, 20 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@420Traveler: - One minor thing left. In the rewritten portion of the geology section, you have "thinly laminated with bentonite. The occurrence of Bentonite". Bentonite should either be lowercase in both places or uppercase both places. Hog Farm (talk) 20:41, 20 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Hog Farm: Ok I fixed that. 420Traveler (talk) 01:31, 21 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Passing Hog Farm (talk) 03:15, 21 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]