Talk:Canadian peacekeeping/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Nikkimaria (talk · contribs) 21:46, 16 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The lead is on the long side given the article's length

Fixed I believe ...a few sentences removed.Moxy🍁 06:15, 19 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"for the common good of all the world's nations and not just its allies". When referring to countries or nations, referring to the world is redundant

Fixed Moxy🍁 06:15, 19 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"approximately 130 Canadians having given their lives" - see MOS:EUPH. Ditto "loss of life"

Fixed Moxy🍁 06:15, 19 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Er, looks like this is still there? Nikkimaria (talk) 04:15, 20 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

sorry my bad.... I think it was there twice or I copying and pasted it back over.Moxy🍁 05:09, 20 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"Approximately 130 Canadians having given their lives during peacekeeping operations (123 in UN missions)." - not a complete sentence. The article would benefit from a thorough copy-editing

Fixed Moxy🍁 06:15, 19 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"Military observers, commanded by Lieutenant-General E.L.M. Burns". Given that the listing is from 1948 to present, this is potentially confusing - suggest clarifying, and doing the same for other similar entries.

Removed..having reasl trouble finding all commanders...some say 7 some say 10 others say 11...so will simply let sources cover this by each mission.Moxy🍁 06:15, 19 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Not a big fan of the organization of the article - the lead section is meant to serve as an overview, so having a separate Overview section doesn't make a lot of sense. One possible division would be History, Operations, and Recognition.

Fixed I believe Moxy🍁 06:15, 19 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"being looked upon to find a solution" - why?

Fixed..reworded Moxy🍁 06:15, 19 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The only significant controversy mentioned is Somalia. The article would be more balanced with discussion of other controversies, such as Rwanda, or critiques of its general approach

Fixed Moxy🍁 06:15, 19 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Suggest adding alt text. Nikkimaria (talk) 21:46, 16 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

FixedMoxy🍁 17:49, 19 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you so much will work on all points...ping you in a few days or so. Moxy🍁 00:34, 17 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Nikkimaria: ok lets take a look ....see what more I can do. No rush!!!!! Moxy🍁 18:04, 19 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Sorry hard to evaluate with edit after edit going on..., the topic can be endless. Will sit back and see what you think. Spring is here. Moxy🍁 23:07, 20 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I think the main remaining issue here is article structure - the organization remains a bit unclear for me. For example, how is the material being divided into Peace operations vs Participation - what goes in one section and what goes in the other? Nikkimaria (talk) 00:22, 21 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I invite you or anyone to edit the structure that best serves our readers. Should we merger the sections?...i am up to whatever you think is best. Moxy🍁 00:35, 21 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Ok got an emal about structure .- info moved around....see what you think..@Nikkimaria:. Moxy🍁 07:21, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I think that's reasonable. Nikkimaria (talk) 19:04, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]