Talk:Calvin E. Lightner/GA1

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Reviewer: LM150 (talk · contribs) 16:26, 27 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

This article was a good read; thank you for your contribution to history! I don't see any major issues - here's my comments and suggestions. LM150 16:26, 27 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"to a formerly enslaved man and a free-born woman of color." - is it pertinent to include this part in the lede?
- Removed. I've seen its common practice to mention if someone was born into slavery or enslaved parents, but the case for that is weaker here since his dad would have been free for 13 years at least.
"In 1919 he and two other black men" - shouldn't we mention their names rather than "two men"?
- I don't think that's necessary in the lede, especially since only one of those guys is actually notable enough to warrant his own article. The important thing is that he teamed up with two other black guys to challenge the political norm.
"Most of his building projects no longer exist." > Most of Lightner's building projects no longer exist
- Done.
"Winnsboro, South Carolina, United States" - no need for United States
- Per WP:GLOBAL, I don't like to assume every Wikipedia readers knows where South Carolina is. For example, many of our articles on African people specify the country they were born in, not just city and province/prefecture, because most American/European readers would have no context for the location.
"By 1906, while still a student at Shaw, Lightner established.." - I think it's clear from the early life section that he was still a student in 1906, so this part might be redundant
- Removed.
"Following his graduation from college.." - graduation was mentioned in the previous paragraph
- This has to do with his somewhat unclear work history. He was doing construction at some point before his graduation from Shaw, and we know that he only started doing funeral work after graduation. I think the specification is therefore providing contextual information, and not just merely redundant. -Indy beetle (talk) 22:41, 28 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@LM150: I've responded to your comments. -Indy beetle (talk) 22:41, 28 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks, I've made a tiny copyedit just for clarity. I'm happy with the image and sources. Now passing. LM150 18:04, 29 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]