Talk:Call Me by Your Name (film)/GA1

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Reviewer: Adamstom.97 (talk · contribs) 05:42, 20 June 2018 (UTC)

I'll grab this one for review. Hopefully I have some thoughts on the article for you within a day. - adamstom97 (talk) 05:42, 20 June 2018 (UTC)

Thank you so much for your attention. I have this huge exam next week so hopefully I will be able to reply to you next Thursday. Damian Vo (talk) 13:59, 20 June 2018 (UTC)

No worries, I have just been through exams myself so I am happy to give you that leeway. I will add some comments here soon, get them sorted as soon as you can (if it is going to be later than next Thursday, let me know). - adamstom97 (talk) 22:32, 20 June 2018 (UTC)

Okay, I'm back. Sorry for the delay. After reading through the article, I think it is pretty good and there are only a few changes needed before I'll be happy to promote it to GA:

• I would suggest adding a line to the lead about the production design required for the setting, around where you mention filming in Italy.

Added. Damian Vo (talk) 03:37, 2 July 2018 (UTC)

• I think you put too much emphasis on awards in the lead, especially since there is a separate article dedicated to them. I think the amount of content regarding awards in the lead should be at least halved.

I removed Chalamet's nominations since Ivory is the sole winner in most of award ceremonies. Damian Vo (talk) 03:37, 2 July 2018 (UTC)

• What is the reason for mentioning "Jewish-American-Italian" and "Jewish-American"? Both of these seem wordy and unnecessary descriptions.

The characters' Jewish background are mentioned in the film. Do you have any suggestions? I removed the "Italian" part. Damian Vo (talk) 03:37, 2 July 2018 (UTC)

I just don't think it is necessary to mention their backgrounds in this way at all. The only time it becomes important is when they are celebrating Hanukkah and I don't think it will be confusing to anyone if that is brought up without their Jewishness being established earlier (similarly, it would not be strange to bring up a character celebrating Christmas even if it was not pre-established that they were Christian). - adamstom97 (talk) 04:30, 2 July 2018 (UTC)

I removed such references in the paragraph. Damian Vo (talk) 05:16, 2 July 2018 (UTC)

• The cast section needs to be sourced. You can use references for each actor, or find one that covers the whole section as in La La Land (film)#Cast.

Added. Damian Vo (talk) 03:37, 2 July 2018 (UTC)

• The current reference in the cast section for Mr. Perlman's full name should be formatted as a note separate from the actual references (see Template:Refn).

Done. Damian Vo (talk) 03:37, 2 July 2018 (UTC)

• I am confused by the line "Spears and Rosenman read the book independently and produced it in 2008." Can you clarify what is meant by this?

I removed the "independently" part. Hope it makes sense. Damian Vo (talk) 03:37, 2 July 2018 (UTC)

My issue is more with the "and produced it in 2008". I'm not sure what is meant by this. I got the independently part. - adamstom97 (talk) 04:30, 2 July 2018 (UTC)

I gave it a little tweak. Is it better now? Damian Vo (talk) 05:16, 2 July 2018 (UTC)

Much better. - adamstom97 (talk) 05:29, 2 July 2018 (UTC)

• The production design section seems like it should come before filming to me, as it is about preparing for filming.

Done. Damian Vo (talk) 03:37, 2 July 2018 (UTC)

• I would recommend separating out the home media content from the release section to its own subsection, which is a pretty standard format for film articles.

Done. Damian Vo (talk) 03:37, 2 July 2018 (UTC)

Let me know once these issues have been addressed, or if you have any questions. - adamstom97 (talk) 01:49, 2 July 2018 (UTC)

Congratulations Damian Vo, this is a good article and you have done well to respond to my concerns in such a timely matter. Sorry again for the delay in getting the review started. This review has now passed . - adamstom97 (talk) 05:30, 2 July 2018 (UTC)