Talk:California sea lion/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 14:16, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

This is really well-written and well-referenced, but a few things are the problems here and there (mostly grammatical and spelling errors):

"...on sandy or rocky beach but can also been found in man-made environments.." in the lead - I fixed the grammatical mistake, no worries.
In the lead, better mention in a line the time of breeding (second paragraph).

Done.

You should rename the 'Classification' section as 'Taxonomy', most articles have it like that. In the first line tell who named the species and when.

Done.

In 'Appearance, physiology and movement',

link pelage to coat (animal). Readers may not understand it.

Done.

This likely because it is enough for them in their marine, coastal habitat. (last paragraph) It sounds a bit grammatically wrong.

Fixed.

In 'Range and habitat',

Sea lions may travel at speeds of around 10.8 km/h. Also give the conversion of km/h in m/h.

Didn't have success with that.

No worries, I have converted it.

In 'Life history',

It seems you forgot to link most of the section. Link some terms like: territory, gestation, blubber (what is this? Better tell a bit in the article) and such.

Done.

These groups begin to disintegrate as the females begin to mate.('Reproductive behavior and parenting', second paragraph) Add the s.

Done.

Molting takes place in autmun and winter. Misspelled.

Fixed.

In communication section, add a few more references.

Done.

Adult male California sea lions play no role in rasing pups ('Reproductive behavior and parenting', third paragraph). Misspelled.

Fixed.

Pups are weaned by a year but can continue to suckle for another year. ('Reproductive behavior and parenting', third paragraph). Change 'by' to 'for'.

"For" is not accurate.

In 'Intelligence and trainability',

Link the name of the biologist.

Done.

A sea lion may go through a year of training. Add 'h'.

Done.

In the Persian Gulf, the animals swim behind divers approaching a US naval ship, and attach a clamp, which is connected to a rope, to the diver's leg. The sentence is a bit difficult to understand - better split it or reword it.

Done.

In 'Status',

Link the places. Also the Humane Society.

Done.

PCB is a dablink.

Fixed.

Once you have corrected these things, I shall make it a GA. It deserves that. Cheers,--Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 14:16, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you LittleJerry (talk) 19:08, 20 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, now it seems the GA I wished it would be. So, I go on to reward it! --Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 04:41, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]