Talk:Caesar Hull/GA1

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 09:23, 10 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I will take this one. Comments will follow later this week. Zawed (talk) 09:23, 10 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Zawed. —Cliftonian (talk) 17:38, 10 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments as follows:

Infobox

Should his allegiance be to the UK?

Well, yes, he was in the Royal Air Force. Normally I would put both the UK and his country of origin, but decided not to this time as he moved to England and joined the RAF directly; it wouldn't seem entirely accurate to me to put Southern Rhodesia, and it also wouldn't seem right to me to put South Africa. —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

OK. Zawed (talk) 08:28, 13 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Early life

Don't suppose there is any info regarding his boxing career?

Not that I could find, but I do agree this is an area that needs expanding. —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Early war

"Hull, Carey and two others together downed another Heinkel on 28 March 1940." Was this a He III?

Yes. —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Norway

"...the pilots took off from the sea on 21 May..." Took off from the sea? I know what you are trying say but maybe rephrase? "...took off on 21 May while at sea..."?

Good idea, have changed —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Heinkel He 111 " a little inconsistent in presentation as you have referred to them simply as He III (apart from first usage) in previous section. Later on it becomes Heinkel.

Have changed usages to He 111 to remove ambiguity. —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"...during 70 combats." This doesn't feel right; "during 70 combat missions."?

How about "during 70 dogfights"? —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Feltwebel, Oberleutnant:link the ranks? And isn't it Feldwebel?

Yes. —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"...and forced to crash near the Bodø airfield.": Is this airfield the same as the one mentioned in the 2nd para of this section? If so, the link should be moved.

Yes. —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Battle of Britain; death

I think the rank in the quote box should be recited in full.

Okay. —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Other stuff

Image tags look appropriate
Duplicate link in lead: Distinguished Flying Cross (first usage is as post-nominal)

I think this is justified as the second usage is in full in the prose of the lead as opposed to in acronym form after his name. —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Fair enough. Zawed (talk) 08:28, 13 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

No dab links
Checklinks tool shows links working OK

This article covers its subject reasonably broadly and is well referenced with reliable sources. The above comments are really just nitpicks. Zawed (talk) 10:14, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you Zawed for the review and the kind words. I hope my changes are satisfactory. —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Changes all good, passing as GA. Zawed (talk) 08:28, 13 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]