Talk:ButterFly (Barbra Streisand album)/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 23:56, 20 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Grabbing this for a review. I will have my comments up by the end of next week by the latest. Aoba47 (talk) 23:56, 20 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Aoba47

I do not believe you need “recorded by” and you can just say “by”.
I would just use “American singer” rather than “American vocalist”. This is a very minor note, but just wanted to make this recommendation to keep this in line with other GAs and FAs on albums.
The phrase “take to Larry King Live” sounds a little odd to me; I would just say “In a 1991 interview on Larry King Live, Streisand revealed that Butterfly was her last favorite album in her music catalog.”
In the sentence n the “Sound and recording” section, I would specify who is suggesting that Tom Scott was more in control of the album’s production than Peter. The phrase “it was suggested” is a little vague.
The phrase (Single "Guava Jelly" is track two and a cover of Bob Marley’s 1971 single) should be revised to avoid the repetition of the word “single”.
Please link “Life on Mars” upon the first mention in the body of the article (it is already linked in the track listing).
I would link “Let the Good Times Roll” in the body of the article (it is already linked in the track listing). Same for “Crying Time”.
Just a clarification question, but did Streisand perform any of the material for this album live? If so, information on that would be appropriate for this article.

I'm sure she probably did, but I unfortunately haven't come across any references that would back this claim up. Even if she did perform a bit of this stuff live, it probably wasn't miss considering his dissatisfaction with the album. Carbrera (talk) 23:09, 21 May 2017 (UTC).[reply]

Makes sense to me. It sounds like she was very unhappy with the end result of this, and getting sources on live performances for the promotion of a 70s album is very hard so I completely understand that. Aoba47 (talk) 23:18, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I am a little confused by the “Track listing” section as the “8-track cartridge edition” shows 10 tracks and appears to be the same from the “Standard edition”.

It is roughly the same, except "Jubilation" and "Crying Time" are switched around. Carbrera (talk) 23:09, 21 May 2017 (UTC).[reply]

Oh, I see now. Thank you for clarifying this for me. Aoba47 (talk) 23:17, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Wonderful job with this article. Once my comments are addressed, I will pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 17:55, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Aoba47 – Thank you for this. Carbrera (talk) 23:09, 21 May 2017 (UTC).[reply]

Thank you for addressing my comments. I will ✓ Pass this. Good luck with your future work. Aoba47 (talk) 23:19, 21 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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