Talk:Bury a Friend/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 14:29, 8 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Stability is back, time to review! --Kyle Peake (talk) 14:29, 8 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Infobox looks good
"singer Billie Eilish." → "singer Billie Eilish from her debut studio album, When We All Fall Asleep, Where Do We Go? (2019)." since you should mention what album it's from before the fact that it is a single
"as the third single from Eilish's..." → "as the third single from the album"
"American alternative radio stations" → "US alternative radio stations" as American is too vague; North and South are respective contents...
"2019 through Darkroom" → "2019, with both releases occurring through Darkroom"
"During the dark and violent lyrics" → "Within the dark and violent lyrics"
"Australia and the United Kingdom" → "Australia, and the United Kingdom"
"the song's release" → "the song's initial release" to specify it was in Jan

"initial" implies that there were multiple versions of the song; it wasn't the case. I don*t think this helps too much...

Alright

"—who provides uncredited vocals on the song—" → ", who provides uncredited vocals on the song," so that we know Eilish is the one being pulled
"at venues including" → "at venues in 2019, including"
Remove 2019 from before the tour in this context

Background and development

"American alternative radio stations" → "US alternative radio stations" as per lead
"to make his acquaintance" → "to make him her acquaintance"

Composition and lyrical interpretation

"credits the song" → "credited the song"
"as a synth-pop,[11] and electronica track in press reviews.[12]" → "as a synth-pop and electronica track in press reviews.[11][12]" comma is not needed and ref 11 can then go at the end of the sentence
Target goth to Gothic rock
""Bury a Friend" is moderately" → "The song is moderately"
Target beats per minute to Tempo
Ref 15 should be at the end of the sentence and the one after 8
Target hip hop to Hip hop music
"screams, as well as a screeching" → "screams, and a screeching"
Target orthodontist to Orthodontics
Italicize Vox
Target chorus to Refrain
"the Doors’" → "the Doors' single"
"herself [...])."[23]" → "herself [...])".[23]"
Ref 28 should be at the end of the sentence and the one after 14

Reception

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"Upon its release," → "Upon release,"
Target music critics to Music journalism
"as well as a highlight on" → "as well as a highlight of"
"its production to that" → "its production to that"
"Kanye West's" → "West's" as we have already mentioned him and remove the wikilink to the rapper
"nightmarish [...] and somehow" → "nightmarish" and claimed that "somehow"
"specific and creepy."[30]" → "specific and creepy".[30]"
"commented the "sinister [nature]" → "commented on the song's "sinister [nature]"
"lyric, [...] unsettling [...], but there's something" → "lyric" and claimed that it is "unsettling", despite there being "something"
"excellent", as well as noticed" → "excellent", and also noted"
"Cantie of" → "Samantha Cantie of"
"as a priority. [...] The" → "as a priority", and elaborated, stating: "The"
"before moving to number 14" → "before moving 60 places to number 14"
Instead at the time wikilink, maybe use a note for writing that "Bad Guy" surpassed it?
Target Billboard to Billboard (magazine) on the second mention in this para
"topping the Alternative Songs chart" → "topping the US Alternative Songs chart"
"only the 10th solo woman" → "only the tenth solo woman"
"first top 10 in the country" → "first top ten on the UK Singles Chart"
"the top 10 in countries" → "the top ten in countries"

Music video

"and has thus been regarded" → "which have led to it being regarded"
"Eilish elaborated" → "Eilish explained"
"from a nightmare as a" → "from a nightmare while a"
"disappears under Mehki's bed.[10] Scenes also see" → "disappears under Mehki's bed,[10] with scenes also seeing" as the sentences can be merged

Live performances and other usage

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First sentence is not needed as it is stating the obvious
"She appeared on" → "Eilish performed the song on"
"black sweater and shorts alongside" → "black sweater and shorts, alongside"
"She further sang it" → "She later sang it"
"The remix sees the original song "run [...] through" → "Bein stated that the remix takes the original song and "runs it through"
"the later half."[59]" → "the later half".[59]"

Credits and personnel

Good

Charts

Weekly charts

Remove Digital Song Sales and Alternative Songs per Wikipedia:CHARTS

Year-end charts

Good

Certifications

Isn't RIAA supposed to be sales+streaming and BPI shipments?

I use the templates, I think they display correct information, though.

Release history

Think we could get this table in to improve the article as the required information exists?

We don't know the medium it was released on on January 30. And in addition to that we only know the release date for the US alternative radio. I personally don't think we need an extra table for the minimum of info we have.

Fine

References

Archive all of these with fix dead links
Ref 1 should be fixed to still cite Tidal as the publisher but not mention the service in the title itself
Rolling Stone shouldn't be cited as a publisher on ref 12 as it is needs to be in italics

I'm confused... it is cited as "work", but still isn't displayed in italics (?)

You had accidentally opened italics in the text, fixed this for you.

Use Hotpress.com as the publisher on ref 15 without the alternate wikilink as this doesn't need to be done per policy
Refs 17, 33 and 34 should all have the last name presented before the first
Vox shouldn't be cited as a publisher on ref 21 as it is needs to be in italics
Ref 25 is bad on copyvio per MOS:QUOTE

It can be used since it's a quote of Eilish's. Also reworded so that it's clear.

As long as it's under the copyvio it's fine, even if it's a quote

Wikilink Vulture to New York (magazine) on ref 33
Wikilink ABC to ABC Online on ref 34
Refs 53 and 57 are unreliable per WP:NOTRSMUSIC
Ref 76 should solely cite Recording Industry Association of Malaysia as a publisher
Ref 77 should wikilink to Billboard (magazine) for consistency in the article
Possible wikilink for ref 83?

Final comments and verdict

On hold until the changes are made, great job here though! --Kyle Peake (talk) 14:17, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Kyle Peake: Thanks for the review. I solved all the concerns apart from where commented. Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:05, 16 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Made a few minor tweaks, but now it's time... ✓ Pass! --Kyle Peake (talk) 08:46, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]