Talk:Burr Caswell/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 14:17, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

• User:The Rambling Man Looking forward to your review. You criticisms and issues are always spot on.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:20, 28 March 2021 (UTC)

• Cheers Doug, I intend to get to this tomorrow. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 20:28, 28 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• The first two sentences seem to say the same thing.

•  Done Copy edited. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:00, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• "Caswell was born in..." this para is clunky, four or five very short paras, suggest a bit of a merge to improve the flow.

•  Done Copy edited. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:20, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• "a couple of years" not particularly encyclopedic tone.

•  Done Copy edited. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:20, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• "some 30 miles" convert.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:29, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• "year's worth of provisions for their journey to Michigan" for us non-US readers, is there some way of expressing how long this journey was?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:54, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• Link schooner.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:54, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• "they got to" ->"they arrived at the"

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:54, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• "built a small ... It was built" repetitive.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:54, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• "very near its" -> "very close to its"

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:54, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• "Mason County officially became a county" link "county" and what was it before it became an "official" county?!

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:03, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• link for shingles?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:03, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• "which sprang up" tone.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:12, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• "a shingle mill in Ludington" link shingle mill first time.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:12, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• "from January 9, 1874 to" comma after 1874.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:12, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• "large hotel, The family returned" full stop, not comma.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:12, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• "where Caswell ten years" died?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:12, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• "... Ludington beside his first wife" this para has no references.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• Mary Caswell image is too small.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• "Edgar achieved fame as a prominent" -> "Edgar became a prominent"

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• "temporary jail.[24][16][23] The" ref order.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• "Registered State Historic Site" no link?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• Maybe too many images of the house, the first and third include the same bookcase for example.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• Consistent ISBN formats.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:46, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

That's all I have, so it's on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 07:43, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• Thanks for review. I'll get started on it.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 08:51, 29 March 2021 (UTC)
• @The Rambling Man: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:46, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• Happy with this Doug, so promoting. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 20:25, 29 March 2021 (UTC)