Talk:Burning Rangers/GA1
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Reviewer: Cognissonance (talk · contribs) 09:21, 27 October 2016 (UTC)
konichiwa motherfuckers Cognissonance (talk) 09:21, 27 October 2016 (UTC)
Lead
[edit]- "remaining only danger" — "only" is unnecessary when you've got "remaining".
- Oops, that was a mistake on my part. JAGUAR 21:05, 27 October 2016 (UTC)
- "Development of the game begun" — Fix grammar: "Development of the game began".
- Another typo, well spotted! JAGUAR 21:05, 27 October 2016 (UTC)
Infobox
[edit]- "European cover art" — Write "box art" for accuracy.
Gameplay
[edit]- "teleport" — The source says "transport".
- Altered. I prefer the Star Trek variant anyway...JAGUAR 21:05, 27 October 2016 (UTC)
- "The crystals shares" — Fix grammar: "The crystals share".
- "In addition, the player also" — "also" is unnecessary when you've got "In addition".
Development
[edit]Conceptualisation and planning
[edit]- "he thought there are few games" — Past tense: "he thought there were few games".
- Corrected. JAGUAR 21:05, 27 October 2016 (UTC)
Design
[edit]- "overachieved" — Shouldn't that be "overreached"?
- That sounds better I think, so I changed it to that. JAGUAR 21:05, 27 October 2016 (UTC)
- "because the stages are very large" — Past tense: "because the stages were very large".
- "Miyoshi designed the characters beforehand" — Minimize repetition: "Miyoshi designed the characters in advance".
- "although this marked the first name they collaborated with Sonic Team themselves" — Simplify: "although this marked the first collaboration with Sonic Team".
- Much better, thanks JAGUAR 21:05, 27 October 2016 (UTC)
Release
[edit]- "delighted to see the game released" — Minimize repetition: "delighted to see it released".
Reception
[edit]- Round down the GameRankings score in the table from 75.40% to simply 75%.
- Use past tense language.
- I went over the section again and applied it throughout. JAGUAR 21:05, 27 October 2016 (UTC)
- "although she admitted that the voice guidance system an innovative element" — Fix grammar: "although she admitted that the voice guidance system was an innovative element".
Overall
[edit]- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
- Overall: Just some polishing and we're all set.
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
@Cognissonance: thanks for the review! I have addressed everything above. Thanks for catching all of the prose errors – I had been working on this all week but I seemed to have rushed some of it the other night. I think I was still writing this until 2am. I don't usually like anime etc but thought that this game deserves recognition because it proved that the Saturn could accomplish true 3D graphics. I'm definitely going to nominate this at FAC as soon as another one of my nominations comes to a close (which should hopefully be soon). Thanks again! JAGUAR 21:05, 27 October 2016 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
- Pass/Fail:
- @Jaguar: Good luck at FAC! Cognissonance (talk) 21:19, 27 October 2016 (UTC)
- a (prose, spelling, and grammar):