Talk:Brotherhood of Man/GA1
GA Review
[edit]I'm sorry to inform the editors of this article that I am quickfailing it. There is just too much to do, and it can't reasonably be done in seven days. Here's some suggestions:
- The title of the article is "Brotherhood of Man" but the band is referred to as "Brotherhood Of Man" throughout the article. Pick one. I'm assuming the first is correct.
- There are a lot of grammar and Manual of Style problems. The article needs a very good copyedit. Maybe somebody in one of the WikiProjects this article is a part of (see tags on talk page) can help.
- There are a lot of short and choppy paragraphs. Combine smaller paragraphs dealing with the subject, or expand them.
- "Many critics argued however that this song was simply cashing in on the success of "Angelo", but although their titles are similar, there is little evidence to support this, as the two songs are very different." - can you elaborate here? how are they different? what critics said what? a quote might be nice? can a citation be provided?
- "although the group remained popular on the live circuit." - source?
- Why did they split up in 1984?
- The "Other Information" reads like a trivia section. Per WP:TRIVIA, what can't be merged into the article text should just be deleted.
- The references need to be formatted using Template:cite web.
- Per WP:EL, there should be no fansites in the external links.
As for a rating, each WikiProject is supposed to decide that for themselves, which is why some articles can be rated (simultaneously) as different classes. Each project has their own standards. Based on my experience assessing articles, I'd agree with the start rating given by WikiProject:Bio. The prose is just to poor to be much higher than that. Follow the suggestions above, and the article might be able to garner a higher rating. One more thing: I've restored the previous review and tags (which were previously deleted) back onto the talk page. Please do not delete them again, as they are the written record of the article's history. Thanks. Good luck and happy editing. Nikki311 02:38, 22 June 2008 (UTC)