Talk:Brooklyn–Queens Connector/GA1
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 04:35, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
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- @Epicgenius: Another review, should be quick. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 04:35, 10 April 2020 (UTC)
Prose
[edit]If at all possible, the route map in the infobox should be autocollapsed.there has been criticism about the project
of the projectAfter electric trolleys in Brooklyn stopped running in 1956,[2] activists led by the Brooklyn Historic Railway Association (BHRA) have been trying to revive streetcars.[3]
If you intend to keep this present tense (not recommended), Since electric trolleys; I recommend rewriting this to be past-tense.In the 1990s, with permission from New York City's government to develop a streetcar line running from Beard Street to Borough Hall, BHRA president Robert Diamond collected disused PCC streetcars that had been used in Boston and Buffalo for potential use on the new line.
Split this into two sentences; first should be Diamond seeking and getting that permission, second should be what he did afterwards.By 1999, Diamond had begun laying new track for the project, but in 2003 transportation officials elected to revoke Diamond's rights to the route's right of way, instead intending to sell them to the highest bidder in the event that the project ever moved forward. Diamond's efforts to secure independent funding were not successful.
Too long. Split this into two or three sentences, too.Diamond had begun laying new track for the project
I assume this is metaphorical. If not, where were these tracks laid?
In 2005, Rep. Nydia Velázquez
Expand "Rep." to "House Rep.", and link to the House of Representatives.Although BHRA
the BHRAthe study, which is not public,
Why do we need to know it's not publicly available?to Atlantic Avenue–Barclays Center.
the Atlantic Avenue-Barclays Centerinto Greenpoint then, using one-way streets close to the waterfront, pass through Williamsburg and the Brooklyn Navy Yard.
and then, and move the one-way streets thing to after "Brooklyn Navy Yard".
Done all. epicgenius (talk) 00:55, 11 April 2020 (UTC)
Link the Pulaski Bridge.within the trains themselves
Change "trains" to "streetcars".Ya-Ting Liu, on May 5, 2016. Liu was hired to oversee route operations and design
CondenseGiambrone is former councilor in Toronto, where he chaired the Toronto Transit Commission.
Combine with previous sentence.statement for BQX
the BQXSouth of there
South of Williamsburg?- Done all. epicgenius (talk) 18:14, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
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@Vami IV: Due to Passover, I won't be able to do any editing from tonight until Thursday evening at the earliest. I am still committed to addressing your concerns with the article. Thanks for your patience and stay safe. @Epicgenius: Thanks so much for helping out!--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 23:12, 14 April 2020 (UTC)