Talk:British industrial architecture/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 12:40, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:51, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• "the industrial revolution in this" that's typically capitalised.
  • Done.

• "offers a connection to the birth of the modern world." whimsical, not encyclopedic in tone.
  • Edited.

• (I ADORE that lead image, I had a dreadful journey back from Reading one day and ended up on the North Circular, passing that building made it almost all worthwhile)...
  • Thanks!

• "1932–5, " -> "1932–1935, "
  • Done.

• "once derided, now admired" I don't think this is appropriate for encyclopedia.
  • Edited.

• "the industrial revolution with" see above. Apply the fix to following instances too.
  • replaced.

• "of the Iron Bridge across " our article just calls it The Iron Bridge.
  • Fixed.

• "Bedlam furnaces" linked in the caption but not here? And in the caption called Bedlam Furnaces...
  • Done.

• "World Heritage site" link WHS. Or even the more specific List of World Heritage Sites in the United Kingdom?
  • Linked.

• In the image captions, check for overlinking, almost everything is already linked above.
  • Fixed.

• "1777-9" -> 1777–1779.
  • Done.

• "Scaling up" not sure how informative this heading is.
  • Edited.

• "corn mills, malt houses, breweries and tanneries" might consider linking some of the slightly more obscure things, like malt house/tannery?
  • Done.

• "as war raised grain prices" which war?
  • The French Revolutionary Wars; soon after, the Napoleonic Wars...

• "Murray's Mills," Murrays' Mills.
  • Fixed.

• "Murray's Mills (for cotton) on the Rochdale Canal, Manc" see above for Mills, and Rochdale Canal is overlinked.
  • Fixed.

• "storey Corn Mill" is there a reason it's capitalised?
  • Fixed.

• "between 1795 and 1805" move that to after the mention of Telford.
  • Repositioned all the dates here.

• More overlinking in most of the captions.
  • Fixed.

• "time of king Henry VIII for" remove "king".
  • Fixed.

• "Chatham Dockyard: from right to" overlinked.
  • Fixed.

• "1785[13]" full stop before ref.
  • Done.

• "No. 3 covered slip" do our readers know what this means?
  • Clarified explanation in sentence.

• "in 1838.[14][11] " ref order.
  • Fixed.

• "Dockyard, Chatham: No. 3 " Chatham overlinked.
  • Fixed.

• "pagoda-like" link pagoda.
  • Linked.

• "Functional design" image captions are full of overlinked terms.
  • Fixed.

• "Early 19th century" full stop.
  • Added.

• "for beer" no need to link common words.
  • Fixed.

• "became the "workshop of the world".[" according to?
  • Disraeli.

• "Eccles Shorrock's India Mill, Darwen and its 300 foot high Italianate campanile chimney, 1867[19]" full of overlinking, and convert 300 foot.
  • Done.

• "Cathedrals of progress" again, a little POV.
  • The exact phrase was Gautier's "Cathedrals of the new humanity", cited, but "of progress" captures its meaning pretty closely.

• "Bristol Temple Meads Station" -> "Bristol Temple Meads railway station"
  • Done.

• Station isn't capitalised in most of these.
  • Fixed.

• E.g. Paddington Station -> London Paddington station.
  • Fixed.

• Check all the image captions, masses of overlinking going on. I won't mention it again.
  • Fixed.

• "1836–40" 1836–1840.
  • Fixed.

• "Grade II* listed " normally hyphenated in this usage and link?
  • Done.

• "1903–4" 1903–04.
  • Fixed.

• "1903-4" same.
  • Fixed.

• "1932–5 " -> "1932–1935"
  • Fixed.

• "combination of Art Deco" overlinked.
  • Fixed.

• "have taken up the challenge" doesn't feel encyclopedic.
  • Edited.

• Nothing from the 21st century?
  • All right, added.

• "Jones, Edgar" en-dash in year range.
  • Fixed.

A nice article, lots to do here, but optimistic. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 15:58, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

• Thanks! All done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:12, 7 September 2021 (UTC)