Talk:Bridget Moynahan/GA1

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Reviewer: HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 12:08, 9 March 2010 (UTC) I'll be back later on to make some comments! HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 12:08, 9 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Checklinks throws up a few supposedly problem external links but, clicking on them, all work so that doesn't concern me.

I'm happy this meets the criteria and I've given it a copyedit for you, so it'll be a nice, easy pass. A few suggestions for taking it further:
Prose quality- I've given it a quick copyedit but it could use a little more attention- a lot of sentences start with "In [year]..." or "Moynanhan..."
- I think I made a consistency. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 19:33, 9 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]
For purposes of readability, I'd suggest splitting the career section into two or even 3 sections and/or subsections
- That's what I thought of doing too, but never knew where to split it from. Update: Alright, I did a test, not sure.
I have reservations about whether the image qualifies as fair use under the NFCC, especially since the subject is living. A Flickr trawl might produce something that can be used or some whose authors could be persuaded to release them.
- Wow, I feel so dumb for not checking the image out. Anyways, I've removed the image, as it fails NFCC. Also, I did a check on Flickr and there aren't any free images available, but I'll keep looking.

Once the other issues have been addressed, I hope you'll put it up for peer review and even FAC and I'll be happy to give a more thorough copyedit if you need it. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 19:12, 9 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review, HJ, I appreciate it. :) Yeah, maybe in the future I'll take this article to a PR. Anyways, thanks again. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 19:33, 9 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

You're quite welcome. Let me know how things go in the future. I think there's potentially a future FA here. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 19:39, 9 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]