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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 20:25, 10 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
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Will start this review tomorrow --K. Peake 20:25, 10 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Where does the body state that recording started in 2018?
  • Removed the recording bit, can't difinitivly prove that production started that year.
  • Replace hlist with bullet points in the infobox
  • Done.
  • Done.
  • Remove venue parameter as that is for live recordings
  • Removed.
  • Remove all caps stylisation from the lead since this is not supposed to be noted for albums
  • Removed.
  • Remove wikilink on studio album
  • Removed.
  • Remove "American record label" introduction to the label since this context is not needed
  • Removed.
  • Done.
  • "and features: Mika Means," → "and features guest appearances from Mika Means," with the appropriate wikilink
  • Changed.
  • Remove target on NoLay
  • Removed.
  • Changed.
  • "distinct genres: Bass house," → "distinct genres of house," with the appropriate target
  • Changed.
  • Done.
  • "The album's themes reflect" → "The themes of it reflect"
  • Changed.
  • "were released as promotional singles:" → "were released as singles in 2019:" with the target
  • Changed.
  • ""Yuck" featuring Gold," → ""Yuck", which features Gold,"
  • Changed.
  • "Ford's collaboration with Skrillex," → "Joyryde's collaboration with Skrillex," with the wikilink
  • Changed.
  • "the debut single of the album;" → "the album's lead single;" with the wikilink
  • Changed.
  • "the announcement of the actual debut single "I'm Gone"" → "the ultimate release of "I'm Gone" as the first single"
  • Changed.
  • "while coping with drug withdrawals" → "around the time of coping with drug withdrawals"
  • Changed.
  • "Three months after..." remove this sentence as you have already wrote about the single and the others
  • Removed.
  • "seventeen months after the album's original" → "17 months after the original" per MOS:NUM
  • Changed.
  • "Upon its release, Brave received positive reviews" → "Brave received positive reviews"
  • Changed.
  • "who noted its attention" → "who noted the attention"
  • Changed.
  • "sound design while saying that" → "sound design, while a few said that"
  • Changed.
  • "most anticipated albums." → "most anticipated albums of 2020."
  • Changed.
  • "The single "I'm Gone" was selected" → ""I'm Gone" was selected"
  • Changed.
  • Done.
  • Done.

Background

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  • "John Ford uploaded a photo" → "Joyryde uploaded a photo" as needs to be changed on multiple cases, since a lot of this is about his musical career not personal life
  • Will change, though since you've specifically listed when to change it from his real name to his stage name, I'll follow those.
  • Changed.
  • Changed.
  • "which teased a collaboration with Ford." → "that teased a collaborative track with Joyryde."
  • Changed.
  • "of an album.[3] Skrillex's record label, Owsla, released the song" → "of an album;[3] Owsla released the song as a single" with the target
  • Changed.
  • "Soon after Ford announced "Agen Wida" he announced his debut album," → "Soon after announcing "Agen Wida", Joyryde announced his debut studio album"
  • Changed.
  • "Ford delayed Brave" → "Joyryde delayed Brave"
  • Changed.
  • Done.
  • Merge the third paragraph with the second para
  • Merged.
  • "Three months later," → "Nearly three months later,"
  • Changed.
  • "Ford announced that" → "Joyryde announced that"
  • Changed, There were multiple instances of this exact wording, which is kinda weird, but I've changed them as well.
  • "the first single from his album" → "the lead single from Brave" with the wikilink
  • Changed.
  • "confused fans as some believed" → "confused fans, as some believed"
  • Changed.
  • "as Ford had announced it" → "due to Joyryde having announced it"
  • Changed.
  • "released as the first single" → "released as the lead single"
  • There were multiple instances of this exact wording as well, so I've hanged them too.
  • "released via Hard Recs, a subsidiary" → "was released via Hard Recs, which is a subsidiary"
  • Changed.
Done.
  • "The release of "I'm Gone" confirmed" → "The release being through the record label confirmed"
  • Changed.
  • "meaning that "Agen Wida" would" → "reaffirming that "Agen Wida" would"
  • Changed.
  • Merge the final para with this one
  • Merged
  • "Ford posted a teaser video" → "Joyryde posted a teaser video"
  • Changed.
  • Done.
  • "early March 2020 showing" → "early March 2020, showing"
  • Changed.
  • "confirmed the album would feature seventeen tracks," → "confirmed Brave would feature 17 tracks,"
  • Changed.
  • "Ford had released in total under the Joyryde alias." → "John Ford had released in total under the Joyryde alias at the time."
  • Changed.

Production and composition

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Recording

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  • Img should be moved to the release section while staying on left; I will provide further instructions for the cover sub-section relevant to this
  • Moved.
  • "Brave's album artwork" → "Brave's album artwork" on the img main text, also wikilink X-ray
  • Done and done.
  • Remove wikilink on extended play
  • Removed.
  • "said that he did not feel like himself and." → "said that he did not feel like himself during this time period."
  • Changed.
  • "hallucinations and suicidal thoughts and put him" → "hallucinations and suicidal thoughts, among other mental issues, and put Ford"
  • Changed.
  • "to finish the extended play." → "to finish the EP."
  • Changed.
  • "before he would" → "before he could"
  • Changed.
  • "but later could not remember making" → "but later could not remember coming up with"
  • Changed.
  • "but he suffered from" → "but suffered from"
  • Changed.
  • "He finished one song" → "Ford finished one song"
  • Changed.
  • The second para should be merged with the first one
  • Done.

Music and lyrics

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  • "explores genres including" → "explores the genres of"
  • Changed.
  • "conveying it as a" → "conveying the analysis as a"
  • Changed.
  • "He went on to say" → "Ford went on to say that"
  • Changed.
  • "but what he wanted it to be." → "though he wanted Brave to be good." since this is what he actually is speaking about
  • That makes more sense, changed.
  • "Ford concluded saying" → "Ford concluded by saying"
  • Changed.
  • "Ford makes use of vocals from featured artists and samples" → "Joyryde makes use of vocals from featured artists and vocal samples"
  • Changed.
  • Done.
  • Change the bass house genre of "I'm Gone" to house per WP:STICKTOSOURCE, as that is what the ref says and it mentions a bassline separately
  • Done, and I'm guessing I wouldn't link house to "House music" because it already was a paragraph before.
  • Remove target on trap
  • Done.
  • [19] should be solely at the end of the sentence
  • Done, I don't know why I put it there in the first place...
  • "produced by Ford while medicated" → "that was produced by Ford when he was medicated"
  • Changed.
  • "He felt his" → "Ford felt his"
  • Changed.
  • "his life as that is what he felt brought himself" → "his life, due to him feeling that was what brought himself"
  • Changed.
  • "female rap vocals based" → "female rap vocals, based"
  • Changed.
  • Done.
  • "The second single "Yuck" is" → "The track "Yuck" is"
  • Changed
  • Remove target on hip hop
  • Done.
  • "and trap music[23] and features" → "and trap music[23], and features"
  • Changed.
  • "Ford was impressed by" → "Joyryde was impressed by"
  • Changed.
  • "It makes use of" → "The song makes use of"
  • Changed.
  • "rather than Ford's" → "rather than Joyryde's"
  • Changed.
  • Done.
  • [25] should be solely at the end of the sentence after [24]
  • Done.
  • "over top." → "over the top."
  • Changed.
  • "estimated he only spent nine hours" → "estimated that only nine hours were spent"
  • Changed.
  • "and left the majority of the record" → "and had left the majority of Brave"
  • Changed.
  • "he did not want" → "Ford did not want"
  • Changed.
  • "if he continued working on it." → "if he did so."
  • Changed.
  • Changed.
  • Merge this para with the above one
  • Done.
  • Wikilink Method Man and add the song's release year in brackets
  • Done and added.
  • Remove target on house music plucks
  • Done.
  • "It is a mix" → "The song is a mix"
  • Changed.
  • "hip hop and makes use of" → "hip hop, with it making use of"
  • Changed.
  • The Wolf of Wall Street should be italicised
  • Done.
  • "set on a" → "that is set in a"
  • Changed.
  • Changed.
  • [33][34][32] should be put in numerical order
  • Done.
  • "was good but felt a" → "was good, though felt a"
  • Changed.
  • "by making it" → "by making the song"
  • Changed.
  • "and making the song sound more" → "and leading to it sounding more"
  • Changed.
  • "He did not want" → "Ford did not want"
  • Changed.
  • "in the song as" → "in the song, as"
  • Changed.

Cover

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  • Move this to being the final sentence of the release section's fist para
  • Moved
  • "The cover for" → "The cover art for"
  • Changed.
  • Changed.

Release

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  • Retitle to Release and promotion
  • Done.
  • "Ford announced the" → "Joyryde announced the"
  • Changed.
  • Remove wikilink on social media
  • Done.
  • "to be on 3 April via" → "to be on 3 April, through"
  • Changed.
  • Remove target on Hard Recs
  • Done.
  • Your EDM should not be italicised
  • Bit weird seeing as they are an online magazine, but done regardless.
  • "was to be released" → "was slated to be released"
  • Changed.
  • "Ford revealed that" → "Joyryde revealed that"
  • Changed.
  • "before its announcement," → "before the album's announcement,"
  • Changed.
  • Remove target on singles
  • Done.
  • "It was made available" → "Brave was made available"
  • Changed.
  • "on the same day as its announcement." → "on 17 March 2020." to reintroduce the date
  • Changed.
  • Changed.
  • "Ford's 2016 single" → "with Joyryde's 2016 Freddie Gibbs collaborative single" with the wikilink
  • Changed.
  • Remove target on "Damn"
  • Done.
  • Second para should be merged with the first one
  • Done.
  • "It was composed of" → "The mix was composed of"
  • Changed.
  • "songs by other artists such as" → "songs by other artists, such as"
  • Changed.
  • "The set was later uploaded" → "It was later uploaded"
  • Changed.

Singles

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  • "Ford featured two" → "Joyryde featured two" on the img main text and wikilink Hollywood Palladium
  • Changed and done.
  • "being "I'm Gone" which was released as a single" → "being "I'm Gone", which was released as the lead single"
  • Changed.
  • "the song surfaced online," → "the song had surfaced online,"
  • Changed.
  • "its official release." → "the official release."
  • Changed.
  • "official release and launched Hard Recs." → "official release by Hard Recs, launching the record label."
  • Changed.
  • "believed that Ford was" → "believed that Joyryde was"
  • Changed.
  • "Ford's previous song," → "Joyryde's previous song,"
  • Changed.
  • Remove wikilink on "Agen Wida"
  • Done.
  • "was thought to be released as the lead single from Brave;" → "was thought to have been released as the lead single from the album;"
  • Changed.
  • "The song's contrast" → "The latter's contrast"
  • Changed.
  • Dancing Astronaut should not be italicised
  • Done.
  • "depiction of Ford's" → "depiction of Joyryde's"
  • Changed.
  • Done.
  • "praising Ford's sound" → "praising Joyryde's sound"
  • Changed.
  • ""Yuck" was released next on" → ""Yuck" was released as the second single from Brave on"
  • Changed.
  • "2019 and featured 20-year-old rapper Gold." → "2019, with a feature from rapper Gold."
  • Changed.
  • "of Ford's signature style" → "of Joyryde's signature style"
  • Changed.
  • "of the composition." → "of the song's composition."
  • Changed.
  • Your EDM should not be italicised
  • Done.
  • "genres as well;" → "genres alongside trap and hip-hop;"
  • Changed.
  • "Ford's distinctive style." → "Joyryde's distinctive style."
  • Changed.
  • Dancing Astronaut should not be italicised
  • Done.
  • "of Ford's most" → "of Joyryde's most"
  • Changed.
  • "Gold's lyrical delivery solidified" → "Gold's delivery solidified"
  • Changed.
  • "to maintain a sense" → "for maintaining a sense"
  • Changed.
  • Remove the speech mark from the end of this sentence as it is not from any started quote
  • Done.
  • "Peach Gallagher praised the single writing that Ford's" → "Peach Gallagher from Run The Trap praised the single, writing that Joyryde's"
  • Changed.
  • "turns "the party" → "turn "the party"
  • Changed.
  • "Ford released "Madden" as" → "Joyryde released "Madden" as"
  • Changed.
  • "The song played during Ford's" → "The song had been played during Joyryde's"
  • Changed.
  • "Ford wrote that after" → "Ford said that after"
  • Changed.
  • Remove wikilink on The Wolf of Wall Street
  • Done.
  • "On 26 July, he featured" → "On 26 July 2019, Joyryde featured"
  • Changed.
  • "his live set" → "his live set at the"
  • Changed.
  • "The energetic release, described by" → "The energetic single, as described by"
  • Changed.
  • Run the Trap → Run The Trap as that is how it is identified
  • As there are multiple instances of this, I've changed this as well as all the other ones as well.
  • "with Ford's signature" → "that features Joyryde's signature"
  • Changed.
  • "Matthew Meadow of Your EDM wrote about" → "Meadow wrote about"
  • Changed.
  • "mixed with the song's" → "being mixed with the song's"
  • Changed.
  • "that only Ford had been" → "that only Joyryde has been"
  • Changed.
  • "Meadow continued to say the song" → "He continued, saying the song"
  • Changed.
  • "in Ford's repertoire." → "in Joyryde's repertoire."
  • Changed.
  • "The release of the fourth single" → "The release of Brave's fourth single"
  • Changed.
  • "Ford explained that" → "Joyryde explained that"
  • Changed.
  • "to postpone it as he" → "to postpone the release of the song because he"
  • Changed.
  • "the day before its initial release." → "the day before the song's scheduled release."
  • Changed.
  • "was later released on" → "was ultimately released as a single on"
  • Changed.
  • "he wanted no make" → "he wanted to make"
  • Changed.
  • "to add contrast" → "to add a contrast"
  • Changed.
  • "from Ford's live sets." → "from his live sets."
  • Changed.
  • Run the Trap → Run The Trap
  • Changed from previous edits.
  • "in Ford's DJ mixes," → "in Joyryde's DJ mixes,"
  • Changed.
  • "Serrano also described how" → "Serrano further described how"
  • Changed.

Music video

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  • "The "Thrill" music video debuted" → "The music video for the track "Thrill" debuted" with the wikilink
  • Changed.
  • "on Ford's" → "through Joyryde's"
  • Changed.
  • [49][48][50][51] should be put in numerical order
  • Done.
  • Done.
  • "who played the" → "that played the"
  • Changed.
  • "before the music video's release." → "before the release."
  • Changed.

Critical reception

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  • "Critical response to Brave" → "Critical response to Brave from music critics" with the target
  • Changed.
  • "Billboard's Kat Bein praised it highly," → "Bein praised the album highly,"
  • Changed.
  • "the best the song for its" → "the best song, noting its"
  • Changed.
  • Dancing Astronaut should not be italicised
  • Done.
  • "the anticipation and that the songs" → "the anticipation, while commenting that the songs"
  • Changed.
  • "with Ford's signature" → "with Joyryde's signature"
  • Changed.
  • "Writing for Your EDM, Karlie Powell praised the album" → "Powell praised the album"
  • Changed.
  • "Ford put into the album" → "Joyryde put into the album"
  • Changed.
  • "She said the song "Brooklyn" was her personal favourite," → "Wright said "Brooklyn" was her personal favourite song,"
  • Changed.
  • "Online magazines included" → "Multiple online magazines included"
  • Changed.
  • "Your EDM and Run the Trap wrote about" → "Your EDM and Run The Trap wrote about"
  • Changed from previous edits.
  • "for their respective lists" → "on their respective lists"
  • Changed.
  • "mentioned the album's delayed" → "mentioned its delayed"
  • Changed.
  • Remove target on Billboard
  • Done.
  • "included the album on" → "included Brave on"
  • Changed.
  • "list in an article" → "lists in an article"
  • Changed.
  • "The song "I'm Gone" was awarded" → ""I'm Gone" was awarded"
  • Changed.
  • "noting its exploration" → "with the staff noting the exploration"
  • Changed.
  • Done.
  • Remove target on bass house
  • Done.
  • "breakbeats and calling it a" → "breakbeats, going on to call the song a"
  • Changed.
  • "on the Best of 2019 by" → "on the Best of 2019, voted for by"
  • Changed.

Track listing

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  • Digital download → Track listing for Brave
  • Changed.
  • Target Isabella Gotti to NoLay
  • Done.
  • Done.

Personnel

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  • Good

Release history

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  • Release formats for Brave → Release dates and formats for Brave
  • Changed.
  • Done.

References

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  • Nice, guess that means I wouldn't need to do any major re-writes then.
  • Make sure all of these archived by using the tool
  • I Tried to use IABot to make sure its all good, but apparently I've been blocked from using it.
  • Run the Trap → Run The Trap on all refs using it
  • Done.
  • Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 1; I am not talking about the name Joyryde as that is the stylisation and keep it in all caps on any of the refs where it is alread
  • Done.
  • Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 2 and cite Dancing Astronaut as publisher instead, keeping the wikilink
  • From what I understand, you want me to replace the "name of website" bit with "publisher", so I've done that.
  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues with refs 3, 4, 10, 46 and 50
  • Done
  • Fix MOS:QWQ and MOS:CAPS issues with refs 7, 17, 19, 22, 23, 27, 28, 33, 34, 36, 42, 44, 48, 51
  • Done
  • Cite Your EDM as publisher instead for all refs using it
  • Done
  • Fix MOS:CAPS issues with refs 11, 15, 18, 20, 21, 24, 25, 30, 32, 35, 38, 41, 43, 46, 53
  • Done
  • Cite Dancing Astronaut as publisher instead for all refs using it
  • Done
  • Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 47 and cite YouTube as publisher instead
  • Done, though I left "JOYRYDE" and "MAJILLA" as that is the stylisation, as you've said previously.
  • Cite Apple Music (US) as publisher for ref 62 with the wikilink
  • Done.

Final comments and verdict

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