Talk:Brandon Medders/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:23, 8 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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"a 4-seam" literally no idea what that means. And should it be four-seam?
"Born in 1980, Medders" you already said in the opening sentence he was born in 1980.
" to draft him" is there a link?
"minor leagues" likewise.
"becoming a free agent" perhaps "once again.."
"three saves.[5] Medders" overlinked.
"2002 was the... " avoid starting sentences with a numeral.
labrum - link.
"call up a fresh arm to help a tired bullpen" hey, I'm certainly no expert but this reads rather whimsical and not particularly encyclopedic in tone.
- Changed fresh to rested. The rest is what the source says. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:22, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  - If it's a quote, quote it. "rested arm to help a tired bullpen" isn't encylcopedic. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 22:26, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    - Decided to just take it out. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 13:54, 11 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"September.[27] He became" merge these two small sentences.
"invitation to spring training.[2] " overlinked.
ESPN is italicised 4 times out of 5...
- The external link is a template; I can't change the formatting there. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:25, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  - Consistency then. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 22:25, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
" Brandon Medders, ESPN: August 26, 2009.[30] fragment, no period.