Talk:Brandon Marshall/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 23:56, 4 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Overall, this article is not too bad, though I do notice many issues with it:

The WP:LEAD does not summarize the article all that well. It's not that bad, but having that many statements that require a reference in there make me think the lead should be modified.
Ref #34 (What to look for - week 3) doesn't actually link anywhere, just to the main nflmedia site, which doesn't help.
In Ref #10 (making of an NFL-caliber receiver), link the appropriate Gazette article (I would have but there's many papers with that title, I didn't know which it was)
I'd expand the college section a bit, add some more from his senior year.
Anything on where he was projected to go in the draft or any comments from coaches? If not then that's okay, but it's be a nice addition.
Try to avoid using blogs as reliable sources, such as [1]. In his case I won't make a fuss since he's reliable himself, but more of a word of caution in the future.
This isn't required, but if you find using citation templates easier to use for referencing, I would prefer that they be used.
"Marshall officially received a three-game suspension from the NFL on August 5, 2008, due to his off-the-field issues." Instead of linking below here, just say shortly what they were.
In the 2008 season, I would trim the touchdown celebration paragraph a bit. It's a nice note, but it's given a lot of weight in the article currently.
"He finished first in fan voting for AFC wide receivers in the 2009 Pro Bowl.[42] He received 18 more votes than Randy Moss to proclaim the top spot. Four wide receivers are chosen to play in the game. Fan voting accounts for one-third of the total voting (players and coaches account for the other two-thirds). He was officially picked to play in his first Pro Bowl when selections were announced on December 16, 2008. Marshall was chosen as a starter.[43]" Overdetailed. Could be reduced to a sentence or two; if people want to know how the pro bowl people are selected they can click on that article.
"His performance earned him the Pudding Pie Award, which is given to the game's MVP by the NFL Network." Add a cite for this.
The legal trouble section should be consolidated into a paragraph or two. Also, any of them that are particularly minor shouldn't be included. Namely, the traffic tickets and 2009 incident don't seem to be useful for the article.

The article is certainly on its way to Good Article status, but at this time I don't feel that it's there yet. As a result, I'll have to fail this article. Use what I listed above to make changes and re-nom it at GA; it should go over much better the second time through. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 23:56, 4 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]