Talk:Boys & Girls (Ayumi Hamasaki song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 20:09, 27 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Soon... Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:09, 27 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Ayumi Hamasaki. It served as the fourth single from Hamasaki's second studio album Loveppears (1999). → Ayumi Hamasaki, serving as the fourth single for her second studio album, Loveppears (1999).
2001 and re-released → 2001, while being re-distributed
It was Hamasaki's first → "Boys & Girls" marks Hamasaki's
served with a maxi single with additional remix tracks → made available for purchase as a maxi single with additional remixes.
song is a dance song → song is a dance recording
that is heavily influenced throughout the parent album, and is written in third-person perspective. → that heavily influences Loveppears. The single's lyrical content is written in third-person perspective.
max release → its physical release
was a success in Japan → experienced success in Japan
Japan. It was → Japan, being
who eventually won first place during the first week of charting. → who eventually outperformed "Boys & Girls" during its first charting week on the Oricon Singles Chart.
"Boys & Girls" managed to replace the former track at number one on the Oricon Singles Chart and TBS' Count Down TV chart. → can be removed from lead
first ever single → first single ever
Double Platinum → double Platinum
which featured → and featured
To promote the single → In order to promote the single
link "remix and greatest hits compilations" to their respective articles on Wikipedia
It appeared as the theme song for the cosmetics company Aube, whom Hamasaki became the spokeswoman. → "Boys & Girls" was additionally used as the theme song for cosmetics company Aube, which led to Hamasaki becoming their spokeswoman.
best selling → best-selling
history, and is one of her highest selling singles → history and remains one of her highest-selling tracks

Infobox

Digital download → digital download
Dance music → Dance

Background and release

is heavily influenced throughout Hamasaki's second studio album Loveppears → heavily influences Hamasaki's second studio album, Loveppears*
The song's instrumentation → The recording's instrumentation
keyboards by Suzuki and → keyboards managed by Suzuki, and
guitar by → guitar provided by
Suzuki, whilst programming → Suzuki. Programming
sheet music at → sheet music published at
During the chorus, its chord progression → Its chord progression
has a sequence of → develops in
Lyrically, "Boys & Girls" (word rep.)
2001 and re-released → 2001, while being re-distributed
The CD format → Its CD version
10 tracks → ten tracks
add a comma after "previous singles" and write the release year for each single in brackets "()"
the former was a stand-alone single, whilst the latter appeared on Loveppears. → this is overfluous and can therefor be removed.
Then in early 2001, Avex USA distributed → In early 2001, Avex USA subsequently distributed
The first two vinyls → The first two of them
conducted by American DJ → produced by American disc jockey
was remixed by → contained remixes by
the CD and digital format → the physical and digital formats
is in the center → is portrayed in the center
are placed around it → surround it.

Reception

Image > Hamasaki's single was beaten by Ami Suzuki's (pictured) track "Be Together" during its first week, but managed to replaced Suzuki's entry by the second. → "Boys & Girls" was commercially outperformed by Ami Suzki's (pictured) "Be Together" during its first charting week on the Oricon Singles Chart, but Hamasaki's single then rose to the leading position.
A member at → A member of
on the maxi single → on its maxi release
The review stated → The review concluded
moods" and labelled the release "high-tension" → moods", and labelled the release of the recording "high-tension".
whom contributed to → who contributed in
It was subjected to controversy by music publications at the time of its release, particularly due to its release date between "Boys & Girls" and "Be Together", a single released by Japanese recording artist Ami Suzuki. It was then catapulted by the press in Japan as a direct competition between Suzuki's label Sony Music and Hamasaki's label Avex Trax to see who would achieve the top position of that week. → It was subjected to controversy by Japanese media at the time of its release, mainly due to it interspersing with the premiere of Japanese recording artist Ami Suzuki's "Be Together", which was perceived as a direct competition between Suzuki's label, Sony Music, and Hamasaki's label, Avex Trax in order to achieve the highest entry on the Oricon Singles Chart.
Unlink "Oricon Singles Chart".
whilst Hamasaki's song debuted → whilst Hamasaki's recording debuted (word rep.)
at number two on the Oricon Singles Chart, selling 261,750 units in its first week of sales. → at number two on that chart, selling 261, 750 copies in its first week of availability.
selling more units and became Hamasaki's second single → becoming the singer's second single
It lasted for 17 weeks → The recording lasted for 17 weeks
one of Hamasaki's longest spanning singles in that chart. → marking one of Hamasaki's longest-spanning songs on the chart.
It lasted 16 weeks in the top 100 → The track lasted 16 weeks within the top 100.
It was ranked → It was additionally ranked
chart; the single was ranked behind one of Hamasaki's other releases, her extended play A, and was the fourth highest selling single by a female artist. → chart behind her extended play A (1999); info about sales on EP is off-topic.
Likewise, it ranked → Likewise, it charted
Double Platinum → double Platinum
It is the 225th best selling single → "Boys & Girls" remains the 225th best-selling single
music history and, as of July 2016, "Boys & Girls" is her fourth highest selling single based on Oricon Style's data base. ← music history, and as of July 2016 the singer's fourth highest-selling recording according to Oricon Style's database.

Music video and promotion

The music video opens → It opens
As usual, I prefer editing the synopsis by myself before passing article
It was used as the theme song for the Japanese cosmetic company Aube, for the launch of their lipstick range, where Hamasaki became the spokeswoman of the company; she appeared in the campaign video. → The visual was additionally used as the theme song for Japanese cosmetics company Aube's launch of their lipstick range, which led to Hamasaki becoming their spokeswoman and appearing in a campaign video.
that being → counting
and added onto → In order to be added onto

Personnel

Rename section into "Credits and personnel"
Credits adapted from the CD liner notes of "Boys & Girls"; → Credits adapted from the single's CD release.
Credits → Technical and songwriting credits

Release history

Use "scope="row" for countries
Unlink formats and labels as usual

Notes

There is currently insufficient evidence to determine what date Hamasaki's digital releases appeared on online retails. The closest source for iTunes Store evidence is at Jame World, whom confirmed Hamasaki's work was released worldwide on iTunes in September 2008 → Please do the same like in "Kanariya", your previous GA pass.

Outcome

I've put this On hold for 7 days in order to allow edits to the article. Don't forget to ping me when you're ready with work or have any questions. Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 22:02, 2 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Cartoon network freak: Hi there; could I please get a two-day extension for this article? I've been busy with real-life situations, but should be done tomorrow. Cheers, CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 03:07, 9 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  - @CaliforniaDreamsFan: For sure. Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:25, 9 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
    - @Cartoon network freak: All done and thank you! My apologises for the late replies; should be finished the other nominations on my talk page tomorrow CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 09:33, 11 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
      - Passing! Congrats, Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:28, 11 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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