Talk:Bound for Glory (2005)/GA1

GA Review

Bound for Glory (2005)

Reviewer: The C of E (talk · contribs) 21:49, 3 January 2014 (UTC) It is reasonably well written.

1. a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

As a wrestling fan, I am always happy to give this a review. My first thoughts are that it is looking good however I feel there are a ew changes needed before it can be a GA.

Nice to see. I'm the only one around here who expands the TNA articles. I've been wanting to get to this one for a long time.--WillC 09:22, 4 January 2014 (UTC)

• No need to call Jarrett the "then champion" in the lead, better context to just refer to him as the champion. Same with Styles later in the lead
  • I do it to give a timeframe, but removed.
• On the Nash medical sentence, you've double comma-ed "however"
  • Fixed
• "Styles defeated Daniels one-to-zero". one to zero what? Falls?
  • Added falls.
• In background, you should have all the info about the fanfest together instead of breaking it up with the ticket info
  • Fixed
• "Several TNA wrestlers were slatted to appear at the event," Don't think I need to say what's wrong with that.
  • Fixed, hopefully.
• check the spacing on the wrestlers listed
  • Crap, result of moving it from subpage. These random deletion of spaces.
• Team Canada should have it's members listed in the background (And removed from the preliminary section). I know who was in it because I watched a lot of TNA at the time but someone who doesn't know much about wrestling in that time probably wouldn't know.
  • I was afraid to do that since the source only says Team Canada and not what members of it. I added the wrestlers. Not sure if D'Amore was there.
• the "slatted" spelling mistake also occurs later in the paragraph
  • Fixed, I don't like the word that much anyway, just removed.
• No need to link Lisowski in the background when he is linked earlier in the lead. The same applies to all linked names
  • I've learned that the lead and the body are not subject to the overlinking rule exactly. If it is mentioned in the lead it should be linked in the body again. Once it is linked in the body the overlinking takes over. At least that is what I've been told through FA.
• No need to list AMW's members in storylines when you've already done that in the lead
  • Above
• link for BG James?
  • Background, among the fanfest members.
• Which match did Ortiz referee at Hard Justice?
  • Added
• "Undisclosed reason"? Surely in context of kayfabe it should be unknown
  • Really nope. They randomly had an unannounced match for Unbreakable. Only thing I know of is Abyss interfered in Sabu's tag match at Sacrifice but there was no follow up. Abyss had been Raven's prior opponent at No Surrender so the interference was rubbed off. Even in several of the reviews for their matches no one knows why the storyline is going on.
• Bit of overuse of the word signature in the Joe-Liger paragraph.
  • I use it in place of finisher. Pretty much only thing I have unless you have an idea. I am very welcome to it. I removed one of them.
• We don't need to know about near-falls early on in the Hoyt paragraph because it didn't have any bearing on the result
  • I added it to give some meat to that match. Instead of it being direct, it has something more than the finish.
• "after crashing into" Bit slang-y, "hit him with" would be better
  • Perhaps "after tackling with" or "after slamming into him with the". The Pounce is a shoulder block. Brown hit him with his body.
• Is mentioning Williams doing the "O Canada nut squash" really necessary?
  • Not really. I added that before adding the match screw ups. Was trying to find noteworthy stuff. Removed.
• Since you already clarified in the lead that America's most wanted was AMW, no need to keep doing it throughout the article. Use AMW after the first mention.
  • I was wondering, I wasn't sure something would continually remember what it stood for throughout.
• In the Monsters ball paragraph, is there a source that says they were to be without food and water? also get rid of the and/or.
  • The review should cover that. Tenay goes over it before they come to the ring. I'll back it up with the DVD cite.
• "Close to the end of the contest, Hardy ascended to the top of TNA's entrance ramp above a sign and jumped off in a somersault towards a prone Abyss, who was laying on a table." Needs rewording.
  • Any better?
• In the Styles-daniels paragraph, again no need to talk about near submissions when they don't affect the result
  • Helps to show they were trying to gain falls in the match, considering the rules.
• Team 3D's members are already listed earlier, no need to list them again
  • Done
• Link for Pro Wrestling Torch Newsletter?
  • Redirects to Wade Keller, not sure if that is needed. Done though.
• The Keller paragraph does seem very jumbled. maybe just focus on the main matches and the highest scored one instead of listing his remarks and grades for every match
  • Removed star ratings. Enough in first two paragraphs.
• Source 36, Is it TNA (which doesn't need to be linked after the first mention) or wrestleview that is the publisher?
  • The work is by TNA, a press release. WrestleView is re-publishing it.
• No need to link Canadian Online Explorer after the first mention
  • If you are talking about the refs, as far as I remember the refs are exceptions to the overlink rule.
• No need for bibliography in the sources section when you've only used it once in source 33
  • I cite to BFG 05 in 33, while the bib is to Genesis.

If you can sort these out, I'll take another look. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 21:49, 3 January 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for the review.--WillC 09:22, 4 January 2014 (UTC)

All the fixes are fine, except for the Brown/Hoyt one. I would say that tackling him would be a better fit. If you can change that, I'll pass it. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 09:46, 4 January 2014 (UTC)

All done.--WillC 01:45, 5 January 2014 (UTC)

We have a new GA. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 08:33, 5 January 2014 (UTC)