Talk:Botswana/GA1
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Nominator: 48JCL (talk · contribs) 20:48, 11 June 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: 750h+ (talk · contribs) 11:46, 29 June 2024 (UTC)
Will review. 750h+ 11:46, 29 June 2024 (UTC)
- @750h+, thank you. Not sure how I just saw this. 48JCL 20:30, 2 July 2024 (UTC)
- Apologies I forgot about this. Starting. 750h+ 02:01, 9 July 2024 (UTC)
prose
[edit]Feel free to refuse any suggestions, with proper justification. 750h+ 02:38, 9 July 2024 (UTC)
lede
[edit]flat, with approximately 70 percent of its territory being
"percent" == "per cent" (WP:BrEng)
Removed all instances.
essentially the nation state of the Tswana people
"nation state" ==> "nation-state"
Done.
who make up 70% of the population.
==> "who constitute 70 per cent of the population." this is for consistency (70 per cent, as it's the same for above, and conciseness).
Done.
Being a country of slightly over 2.4 million people, and roughly the size of France
remove the comma
Done.
declared a protectorate under the name of Bechuanaland
==> "declared a protectorate named Bechuanaland"
Done.
As of 2024, Botswana is the third least corrupt country in the continent of Africa.
remove "the continent of"
Done.
Since then, it has been a parliamentary republic, with a consistent
remove the comma
Done.
world's biggest diamond producing country.
"diamond producing" ==> "diamond-producing"
Done.
history
[edit]- prehistory
Stone tools and fauna remains have shown that all areas of the country were inhabited at least 400,000 years ago
==> "Stone tools and animal remains indicate that all areas of the country was inhabited at least 400,000 years ago."
Done.
Botswana was reported to be the birthplace of all modern humans about 200,000 years ago.
why "was reported"
Fixed.
a major feature of the economy, since the
remove the comma
Done.
heritage site in Botswana originally occupied towards
"originally" ==> "initially"
Done.
states in Zimbabwe as well as to the Mapungubwe state and the notable of these was
==> "states in Zimbabwe as well as to the Mapungubwe state, and the notable of these was"
Done.
The site is a respected place for the people living in the region and it is believed
add a comma after "region"
Done.
top of the hill together with his helpers or assistants
remove "together"
Done.
this settlement range from 7th to late 19th
==> "this settlement range from the 7th to late 19th"
Done.
with cattle keeping as major source of
==> "with cattle keeping as a major source of"
Done.
Toutswe settlement include house-floors, large heaps of vitrified cow-dung
==> "Toutswe settlement includes house-floors, large heaps of vitrified cow dung"
Done.
settlements in South, Central Africa.
==> "settlements in South and Central Africa."
Done.
- What is "centaurs ciliaris"?
Removed. Not sure either, doesn't seem to be relevant to the history of Botswana.
of the Tswana-speakers who
remove the hyphen
Done.
- Also, before I continue with the review, every book will require its page numbers. 750h+ 04:38, 11 July 2024 (UTC)
- Damn that took way longer than expected. — 48JCL 21:47, 12 July 2024 (UTC)
- A tag was added in the lead. Can you address that? 750h+ 06:39, 13 July 2024 (UTC)
- Also the pp. 26-143 is too far a page range, a smaller page range would be better, and they’d need to verify exactly what is on the page. 750h+ 06:42, 13 July 2024 (UTC)
- 48JCL, I think that with this page range, I'm going to fail this nom. The content is not bad but the history section may benefit from cleanup. @Thebiguglyalien: may be able to help. Once these issues have been addressed i'd be happy to review, but this that some informal peer review for sourcing might help. 750h+ 07:25, 13 July 2024 (UTC)
- Damn that took way longer than expected. — 48JCL 21:47, 12 July 2024 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.