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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 06:50, 8 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

This review shouldn't take very long at all! --K. Peake 06:50, 8 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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Would a "hlist" for he languages be appropriate here?
  • "It was written by" → "The song was written by" plus this should be the second sentence of the lead instead
  • "who also produced the single." → "who also handled the production."
  • ""Bonnie & Clyde" is an Albanian and German-language hip hop and R&B song with" → "An Albanian and German-language hip hop and R&B song, it contains"
  • Remove American criminal couple introduction since that being in the body is sufficient enough
  • "about both rapper confessing" → "about both rappers confessing"
  • Remove "for "Bonnie & Clyde"" after the accompanying music video part, as this implies it was accompanying the song
  • Too much info on release for the lead; change to mentioning it being released to YouTube in September 2018
  • "generally received the single with favorable" → "generally gave "Bonnie & Clyde" favorable"
  • "as well as their collaboration." → "as well as the rappers' collaboration."
  • "The single was a" → "The song was a"
  • "success and reached number two in" → "success, reaching number two in both" removing the respectively part with this
  • Remove the high sales part because that is implied
  • ""Bonnie & Clyde" has been also awarded" → "It has been also awarded"

Background and composition

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  • "of a upcoming single." → "of an upcoming single."
  • Remove Kosovo-Albanian rapper introduction to Mozzik here because he is one of the main subjects
  • "It was written by" → "The song was written by"
  • ""Bonnie & Clyde" is a" → "Musically, "Bonnie & Clyde" is a"
  • "song also incorporating" → "song, which incorporates"
  • Mention the song having an up-tempo beat per Red Bull
  • "both rapper lyrically" → "both rappers lyrically"

Reception and music video

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  • Retitle to Reception and promotion
  • "Up-tempo sounds stating that its a" → "up-tempo sounds, stating that it is a"
  • Red Bull should not be italicised
  • "from Hiphop De found Loredana's rhyming techniques as" → "from Hiphop De found Loredana's rhyming techniques to be"
  • "while German website Laut.de" → "while the staff of laut.de" with the wikilink
  • "number two in Austria and Switzerland, respectively, and received" → "number two in both Austria and Switzerland, having since received"
  • You need to add citations for the chart positions
  • Directly mention the countries that the certifications were in
  • Remove the word accompanying before music video
  • "received over 11 million views in" → "received 11 million YouTube views in"

Credits and personnel

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  • Shouldn't songwriting be first for the latter two like it is for the first and if not, vocals should be first for them per inconsistency

Track listing

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  • Good

Charts

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  • The peak position for Austria is displayed as 3, not 2

Certifications

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  • Good

Release history

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  • Good

References

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  • Copyvio score looks undetectable!!!
  • Wikilink Telegrafi on ref 4 instead of ref 6
  • Pipe Red Bull to Red Bull GmbH on ref 7
  • Laut → laut.de on ref 8, citing as publisher instead with the wikilink
  • Remove pipe on Red Bull for ref 9
  • Cite YouTube in the via parameter instead on ref 11

Final comments and verdict

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Hey @Kyle Peake: good to hear from you again. Your comments have been solved except for one where I left a response on. Iaof2017 (talk) 12:43, 8 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Iaof2017 Good to hear from you to, but I would like to point you to Template:Infobox song on bullet points: "For short horizontal lists of two or three items, comma separators are acceptable, but for longer lists, format the items as a normal bulleted list; don't use other list templates or
." Also, you forgot to remove "over" before the views part and why is Austria position listed as 2? --K. Peake 20:28, 8 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Kyle Peake I've fixed everything you suggested. Greets and thank you for your time :D Iaof2017 (talk) 18:59, 9 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]