Talk:Bonnie & Clyde (Loredana and Mozzik song)/GA1
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 06:50, 8 April 2022 (UTC)
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This review shouldn't take very long at all! --K. Peake 06:50, 8 April 2022 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- Replace hlist with bullet points per Template:Infobox song
- Would a "hlist" for he languages be appropriate here?
"It was written by" → "The song was written by" plus this should be the second sentence of the lead instead"who also produced the single." → "who also handled the production."""Bonnie & Clyde" is an Albanian and German-language hip hop and R&B song with" → "An Albanian and German-language hip hop and R&B song, it contains"Remove American criminal couple introduction since that being in the body is sufficient enough"about both rapper confessing" → "about both rappers confessing"Remove "for "Bonnie & Clyde"" after the accompanying music video part, as this implies it was accompanying the songToo much info on release for the lead; change to mentioning it being released to YouTube in September 2018"generally received the single with favorable" → "generally gave "Bonnie & Clyde" favorable""as well as their collaboration." → "as well as the rappers' collaboration.""The single was a" → "The song was a""success and reached number two in" → "success, reaching number two in both" removing the respectively part with thisRemove the high sales part because that is implied""Bonnie & Clyde" has been also awarded" → "It has been also awarded"
Background and composition
[edit]"of a upcoming single." → "of an upcoming single."Remove Kosovo-Albanian rapper introduction to Mozzik here because he is one of the main subjects"It was written by" → "The song was written by"""Bonnie & Clyde" is a" → "Musically, "Bonnie & Clyde" is a""song also incorporating" → "song, which incorporates"Mention the song having an up-tempo beat per Red Bull"both rapper lyrically" → "both rappers lyrically"
Reception and music video
[edit]Retitle to Reception and promotion"Up-tempo sounds stating that its a" → "up-tempo sounds, stating that it is a"Red Bull should not be italicised"from Hiphop De found Loredana's rhyming techniques as" → "from Hiphop De found Loredana's rhyming techniques to be""while German website Laut.de" → "while the staff of laut.de" with the wikilink"number two in Austria and Switzerland, respectively, and received" → "number two in both Austria and Switzerland, having since received"You need to add citations for the chart positionsDirectly mention the countries that the certifications were inRemove the word accompanying before music video"received over 11 million views in" → "received 11 million YouTube views in"
Credits and personnel
[edit]Shouldn't songwriting be first for the latter two like it is for the first and if not, vocals should be first for them per inconsistency
Track listing
[edit]- Good
Charts
[edit]The peak position for Austria is displayed as 3, not 2
Certifications
[edit]- Good
Release history
[edit]- Good
References
[edit]- Copyvio score looks undetectable!!!
Wikilink Telegrafi on ref 4 instead of ref 6Pipe Red Bull to Red Bull GmbH on ref 7Laut → laut.de on ref 8, citing as publisher instead with the wikilinkRemove pipe on Red Bull for ref 9Cite YouTube in the via parameter instead on ref 11
Final comments and verdict
[edit]- On hold until everything is fixed, after this quick review! --K. Peake 07:49, 8 April 2022 (UTC)
- Hey @Kyle Peake: good to hear from you again. Your comments have been solved except for one where I left a response on. Iaof2017 (talk) 12:43, 8 April 2022 (UTC)
- Iaof2017 Good to hear from you to, but I would like to point you to Template:Infobox song on bullet points: "For short horizontal lists of two or three items, comma separators are acceptable, but for longer lists, format the items as a normal bulleted list; don't use other list templates or
." Also, you forgot to remove "over" before the views part and why is Austria position listed as 2? --K. Peake 20:28, 8 April 2022 (UTC)- Kyle Peake I've fixed everything you suggested. Greets and thank you for your time :D Iaof2017 (talk) 18:59, 9 April 2022 (UTC)
- ✓ Pass now, nice work on this review once more!!! --K. Peake 06:25, 10 April 2022 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake I've fixed everything you suggested. Greets and thank you for your time :D Iaof2017 (talk) 18:59, 9 April 2022 (UTC)
- Iaof2017 Good to hear from you to, but I would like to point you to Template:Infobox song on bullet points: "For short horizontal lists of two or three items, comma separators are acceptable, but for longer lists, format the items as a normal bulleted list; don't use other list templates or