Talk:Bolivia Carmichaels/GA1
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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 12:50, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 12:50, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
Images are appropriately tagged; sources are reliable.
- The only issue with the article is that there are rather a lot of direct quotes for such a short article. There are seven quotes, with a total length of about one third of the article. I think at least half of this should be paraphrased.
-- Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 12:58, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
- @Mike Christie Thanks for reviewing. I've removed 3 of the quotes, which leaves the following:
- Superstar Diva MegaShow described as "self-expressive takes on ginger-haired comediennes, Hollywood starlets and Disney villains, among other icons"
- Jankowski's description of Darcelle XV Showplace as "the go-to place for the most traditional style of drag: heavy makeup, classic gowns, and groan-worthy jokes from some of Portland's finest queens"
- Crown Prince Roc Award is presented "to an individual after years of service, that keeps our organization larger than life, not only a presence but a mover and a shaker in the community through performance and activism"
- Drew York's quote, "A longtime queen with a history of community outreach, Bolivia Carmichaels gave a multi-faceted performance, dressed in a velvety purple gown and lip-synching a duet to 'A Whole New World' with a puppet. Carmichaels allowed her hobby of puppeteering to take center stage, and it certainly had humorous moments."
- Do you think further paraphrasing is needed, or are these 4 quotes reasonable? ---Another Believer (Talk) 14:43, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
- I think a bit more cutting is needed. Sorry -- I know some of them are colourful, but the article is so short that there's just too much quoted wordage percentage-wise. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:46, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
- @Mike Christie No problem. I've done some more trimming. I believe there are now only 2 quotes longer than a few words. Does this work for you? ---Another Believer (Talk) 14:59, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
- That does it; thanks. Passing. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 15:00, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
- Thank you! ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:06, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
- That does it; thanks. Passing. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 15:00, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
- @Mike Christie No problem. I've done some more trimming. I believe there are now only 2 quotes longer than a few words. Does this work for you? ---Another Believer (Talk) 14:59, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
- I think a bit more cutting is needed. Sorry -- I know some of them are colourful, but the article is so short that there's just too much quoted wordage percentage-wise. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:46, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.