Talk:Body Talk Pt. 2/GA1

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Reviewer: Novice7 (talk) 16:59, 17 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be reviewing this article. Novice7 (talk) 16:59, 17 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Very good work Pancake! Here are a few comments:

DAB/EL Check:
- No DAB
- A dead link and a few redirects: [1]

Media:
- The source for album art can be formatted to look better. Add something like: "Obtained from Konichiwa Records Official Website"
- File:Robyn_Hang_with_Me.OGG needs an extra fair use rationale for Body Talk Pt. 2.

Lead

Robyn started working on songs for the album [..] still in the works – though they're not connected her, "working" and "work" are redundant. Please change it.
classic single – I suppose it's Single (music). If so, link it.
In the United States, it peaked at number forty-one, becoming Robyn's highest position on the chart. The album charted moderately elsewhere, reaching number one in Denmark and number three in Norway. – number one is not a moderate success. Also, arrange the chart performance according to the chart success. Sweden -> Denmark -> Norway and then US.
Can you include the year Body Talk Pt. 1 was released in brackets?

Background

Year after Robyn.

*Since Robyn is from Sweden, add "US music weekly" before Billboard.

Shouldn't it be something like "music magazine"? I don't understand "US music weekly Billboard" :P Pancake (talk) 17:29, 24 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, oops! I'm kinda sleepy, lol. Music magazine/journal it is :) Novice7 (talk) 17:32, 24 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

lol:) the work is done. Pancake (talk) 17:33, 24 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

sing vocals on a remix of his single "Sexual Eruption." – year after "Sexual Eruption" and the period should go outside the quote.

Composition

Mention the name of the author before The Guardian's analysis.
Link synth
The first and only single, "Hang with Me", carries – remove the "first and only single" part. it is mentioned below (in Singles section).
"was described" repeats... (The fourth track, "Love Kills" was described as [...] "We Dance to the Beat" was described as..)
If possible, can you reduce the quoted material by converting them to reported speech?

Critical reception

Indicate the Metacritic score summary (Generally favorable reviews)
Body Talk Pt. 2 is a perfectly solid-- and occasionally awesome-- – fix the "--" to "—"
Heather Phares of Allmusic wrote that Robyn proves with the album – Try Heather Phares of Allmusic wrote that through the album, Robyn proves that...

Commercial performance

For the Billboard chart, can you provide the debut date/week?
Year after Robyn Is Here
I can see that there are few more charted regions. Maybe add them to this section?

I added "The album also reached the top fifty in Belgium (Flanders), Ireland, Finland, Germany and Austria". I don't think there's anything else to say :) Pancake (talk) 17:29, 24 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

That's much better :) Novice7 (talk) 17:32, 24 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Singles

I feel the thing about "Hang with Me" being recorded by Bruna and Robyn's comment on the song will fit better on "Background" section.

Charts

Properly sourced and arranged. The only thing is that the Succession boxes should be moved and placed below the Metacritic external link (per WP:FOOTER)

References

Refs 4,9,12,17,23,28,29,33,40,42,58 missing Publisher (I know, a big list :D)
Look out for overlinked references.

On hold for seven days. Novice7 (talk) 16:21, 24 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I think I've fixed everything now. let me know if i missed anything, or if there's something to improve further :) Pancake (talk) 17:05, 24 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I've underlined the remaining issues. Other are all done. Good job. Novice7 (talk) 17:23, 24 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'm happy with the improvements. Passing :) Novice7 (talk) 17:37, 24 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]