Talk:Bobby Brazier/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: ArturSik (talk · contribs) 12:25, 8 June 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: FishLoveHam (talk · contribs) 11:34, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

Hey, I'm taking on the review, expect comments soon :) FishLoveHam (talk) 11:34, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

Overall it's solid, just a couple things to iron out.

Infobox and lede

• Add a comma after "mother".
• Remove comma after "career".
• "He rose to prominence after joining the cast of the BBC One soap opera EastEnders as Freddie Slater in 2022, which earned him a National Television Award." split into two sentences and consider rewording the first one. (Example: "In 2022, he rose to... Slater. For the role he earned a NTA.")
• Remove comma after "2023".
• "Dancing show" → "Dancing competition show". (Just clearer for non-British readers)

Early life

• "him and his younger brother" → "he and his younger brother".
• Add comma after "future wife".
• "up until" → remove "up".
• Remove comma after "seven".
• Remove comma after "café".

Career

Modelling

• "at the age of 16" → "at age 16".
• Remove comma after "street" and add one after "agency".
• Remove commas after "London Fashion Week" and "GCDS".
• "As a model, Brazier featured" → "As a model, Brazier was featured".

EastEnders

• Add comma after "producer".
• "had last been seen" → "last appeared".

Strictly Come Dancing

• "took part" → "participated" or "competed".

Other endeavors

• Remove comma after "Gogglebox".
• "raising" → "to raise"

References

• Ref 3 is unreliable and should be removed.
• Sources are archived.
• Ping me when you're done. FishLoveHam (talk) 12:56, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

  Hi, FishLoveHam. All comments addressed. Thanks for the review. ArturSik (talk) 13:44, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

  Great job ArturSik! FishLoveHam (talk) 14:35, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

Progress

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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