Talk:Bob Booker (writer)

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I have fixed the informal tone throughout, as much as I can distinguish. Thoughts? Earthurb (talk) 22:36, 27 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I would recommend letting someone from WP:GOCE have a pass at it. Terms like "landing his first job", and "a new television station went on the air" are too colloquial. Something like "was first employed" and "a new television station began operation" are more formal. "His ultimate dream was to work in New York City" should not be said in Wikipedia's voice. If he actually said that, "ultimate dream" should be quoted. If those are not his words, then they should be removed and the sentence rephrased. These are just a few examples. MB 04:20, 28 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the input. I have revised the portions you stated.