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The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:58, 31 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

So I'm reviewing one of your articles once again; thought I'd do this since you have three song nominees currently pending review. --K. Peake 08:58, 31 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Infobox looks good, apart from the lack of streaming under release formats
  • "and it's producer Jon Levine." → "and its producer Jon Levine."
  • "It was released through" → "The song was released for digital download and streaming through" with the appropriate targets
  • Target single to Single (music)
  • "and impacted contemporary hit radio" → "and later impacted contemporary hit radio"
  • ""Blow Your Mind (Mwah)" is an" → "It is an"
  • Target tropical to Tropical music
  • Target synths to Synthesizer
  • "was met with generally positive reviews" → "received generally positive reviews"
  • "gave Lipa her first US Billboard Hot 100 entry, where it reached number 72." → "her first US Billboard Hot 100 entry by reaching number 72."
  • "number 23 at US Pop Radio" → "number 23 on the US Mainstream Top 40 chart" with the appropriate wikilink since that is its name
  • "It received a gold and platinum certification" → "It was certified gold and platinum in the US and the United Kingdom"
  • "The song additionally entered..." remove this sentence
  • "London's Barbican Centre and features" → "London's Barbican Centre, and features" with the wikilink
  • "posing and walking around the area." → "posing in the area, as well as walking around."
  • "The video is a" → "According to Lipa, the video is a"
  • "Lipa also promoted the single with live performances at BBC Radio 1's live lounge" → "Lipa further promoted the song in 2016 with live performances for BBC Radio 1's Live Lounge" with the wikilink
  • "and Karma Kid as well as an acoustic" → "and Karma Kid, as well as an acoustic" with the target

 Done

Background and release

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  • "Levine also handling the production." → "Levine solely handling the production."
  • "Lipa was inspired after" → "Lipa was inspired for the song after"
  • "on 26 August of that year as the fifth single" → "and streaming two days later as the fifth single" with the targets
  • "her eponymous debut studio album, along" → "Dua Lipa, along"
  • "The song impacted" → "The song was serviced to"
  • Add what dates the radio releases were
  • "was also serviced to that radio format in" → "was released via the same radio format in both"
  • "released 2 June 2017." → "released on 2 June 2017."
  • Target acoustic to Acoustic music
  • "Night Moves and Black Saint" → "Night Moves, and Black Saint"
  • Mention the release dates of the acoustic version and remixes; maybe write the acoustic was simultaneous with the initial single release and then state the release date exactly of the remixes ep?
  • Target handclaps to Clap

 Done

Music and lyrics

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  • Target synths to Synthesizer on the audio sample text
  • Sure you shouldn't expand the sample's text?
  • "nu-disco song with tropical beats and" → "nu-disco song, with tropical beats alongside"
  • "and span from" → "and range from"
  • Doesn't the lyrics sentence belong in the ending para instead?
  • Usually yes, but I was analyzing the lyrics from every part of the song so for the first paragraph, I just wrote it for the song as a whole, then the other paragraphs are about the different parts of the song.: verse, chorus, pre-chorus. LOVI33 17:26, 2 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "synths and echoing tribal drums." → "synths, and echoing tribal drums."
  • Target verse to Verse (music) per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • "at one time she wasn't." → "at one time she was not."
  • Wikilink pre-chorus
  • "was crazy for it as well as commenting how people think she's" → "was crazy for it, as well as commenting that people think she has"
  • "have just gotten bigger." → "have only gotten bigger."
  • "Vocally, she blows a kiss" → "Vocally, Lipa blows a kiss"
  • "in the heat of an argument," → ""in the heat of an argument,""
  • "meaning they've chosen her because they wouldn't" → "meaning that they have chosen Lipa because they would not"
  • "Lipa addresses the person, stating" → "Lipa addresses the lover, showing that"

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Critical reception

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  • "Idolator's Rachel Sonis labeled it "feisty" and went on to say" → "Sonis labeled it "feisty" and said"
  • "state that it" → "state that the song"
  • "and "infectious"" → "and "infectious.""
  • "Mike Nied of the same website labelled it" → "Mike Nied, also of Idolator, labelled the song"
  • "Raúl Guillén of Jenesaispop however enjoyed" → "However, Raúl Guillén of Jenesaispop enjoyed"
  • "writing it's" → "writing that it is"
  • "named it the 73rd best song of 2016, praising it's combination" → "later named it the 73rd best song of 2016, praising the combination"
  • "calling it's chorus "casual and fresh" and" → "calling the chorus "casual and fresh," while"
  • "in-your-face" and" → "in-your-face" as well as"
  • "called the song" → "viewed the song as"
  • "criticized it's lack of longevity writing its" → "criticized the lack of longevity, writing that it is"
  • "Rick Pearson for" → "Rick Pearson from"
  • "as well as comparing it" → "and compared it"
  • "and wrote it" → "and wrote that it"
  • "concluded by stating "[t]here isn’t" → "concluded by stating, "[t]here isn't"
  • "Billboard called the song" → "The staff of Billboard called the song"
  • Shouldn't the closing para be ordered so the positive reviews come before mixed/negative ones?

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Commercial performance

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  • "In the United Kingdom, "Blow Your Mind (Mwah)" debuted at" → ""Blow Your Mind (Mwah)" debuted at"
  • "becoming her second entry on the chart" → "becoming Lipa's second entry on the chart,"
  • Add release year of the song in brackets
  • "reached a peak of 30 and lasted for an additional eight weeks after that." → "reached a peak of number 30 and lasted for an additional eight weeks afterwards."
  • "the song received a platinum certification from the" → "the song was certified platinum by the"
  • "for selling over 600,000 units." → "for selling 600,000 units in the UK."
  • "to eventually peak at" → "and eventually peaked at"
  • "The single was more successful" → "The song was more successful"
  • "and reached a peak of 15." → "and later reached a peak of number 15."
  • "in Australia, where it reached a peak of 59." → "of Australia, on which it reached number 59."
  • "In the United States, "Blow Your Mind (Mwah)"" → "In the US, "Blow Your Mind (Mwah)""
  • "and only lasted one week." → "though the song only lasted one week."
  • "it reached number 23 on US Pop Radio," → "it reached number 23 on the US Mainstream Top 40 chart," with the wikilink
  • Remove target on Billboard
  • "the song received a gold certification from the" → "the song was certified gold by the"
  • "for selling over 500,000 units." → "for sales of 500,000 certified units in the US."

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Music video

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Background

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 Done

Synopsis and reception

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  • "through a megaphone with" → "through a megaphone, accompanied by" on the img main text with the wikilink, plus are you sure she was not singing?
  • "The video opens with Lipa" → "The music video opens with Lipa"
  • "the girls were noted for having individualistic appearances." → "the girls appear in a manner that was noted for being individualistic."
  • The bench statement does not appear to be backed up, unless it has been worded differently and I did not look properly
  • "They chew gum" → "The group chew gum"
  • "blow bubbles as" → "blow bubbles, as"
  • This sentence appears not to be backed up; I will not instate this for every sentence that has not been done so, I assume you can back any unsourced ones up yourself
  • "where Lipa walks backwards singing" → "where Lipa walks backwards while singing"
  • Target rainbow flag to Rainbow flag (LGBT)
  • "and signs that say" → "alongside signs that say"
  • "and "You Can Sit With Us."" → "and "You Can Sit With Us"."
  • "goes to a roof top where" → "go to a roof top on which"
  • "with the song's title" → "with the song's title on it"
  • "Mike Nied of Idolator called the visual a" → "Nied called the visual a"
  • "V, viewed it" → "The staff of V viewed the video"
  • "Bianca Gracie stated the" → "Bianca Gracie stated that the"
  • "In Coup De Main Magazine, Rose Riddell" → "In Coup De Main Magazine, Rose Riddell"
  • "DIY stated that the video makes London look like paradise." → "The staff from DIY stated that the video makes London look like a paradise."

 Done

Credits and personnel

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  • Promonews should be italicised
  • Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel

 Done

Live performances

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  • "in 2016 and 2017 as well as the" → "in 2016 and 2017, respectively, as well as at the"
  • "in BBC Radio 1's live lounge," → "on BBC Radio 1's Live Lounge," with the wikilink
  • "On 13 October, she performed" → "On 13 October of that year, she performed the song"
  • "she performed the song" → "Lipa performed the song"
  • "On 29 November 2016, she performed the song on American talk show Today." → "She performed the song for American talk show Today on 29 November 2016."
  • "She also performed the song in a session" → "Lipa performed the song during a session"
  • "she performed it in" → "she performed it for"

 Done

Track listings

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  • Maybe add streaming to the titles of the digital downloads?
  • Remove target on EP

 Done

Credits and personnel

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  • Use spaced ndash so there is the right space between credits and personnel
  • Sub-sections should be sub-headings instead

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Charts

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Weekly charts

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  • "Venezuela English" → "Venezuela"

 Done

Year-end charts

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  • Good

Certifications

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  • Only double-dagger should be cited at the bottom of the table

 Done

Release history

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  • Add streaming next to digital download with the target
  • Digital download (second mention) → Digital EP
  • Remixes EP → Remixes

 Done

See also

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  • Good

References

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  • Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
  • Copyvio score looks great at 13.8%!
  • Cite iTunes Store (US) as publisher instead for ref 5, removing the location parameter and add more citations with the formatting to back up that the release was various
  • Replaced with media source, the song was removed from iTunes after the release of Dua Lipa.
  • Cite iTunes Store (GB) as publisher instead for ref 10, removing the location parameter and add more citations with the formatting to back up that the release was various
  • Do the same for ref 11
  • de la Rosa, Manzanares → Rosa, Manzanares de la on ref 15
  • Ref 22 should not cite the date before its title
  • Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 25
  • Add correct spacing for the note of ref 39
  • Target Noise11 to Paul Cashmere
  • Remove or replace ref 57 per WP:RSP
  • Coup De Main → Coup De Main Magazine on refs 60, 66, 71 and 72
  • Ref 75 archive appears to have been blacklisted by my laptop's security machine; also, a publisher is missing
  • Cite Gaon Music Chart instead for ref 81 with the wikilink
  • Wikilink Record Report on ref 85

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Final comments and verdict

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