Talk:Bledsoe's Missouri Battery/GA1
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 13:50, 1 August 2020 (UTC)
I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:50, 1 August 2020 (UTC)
- No DABs, images appropriately licensed
- Proportions look a bit off on the Confederate Battle Flag
- Tried to fix this. I think the problem is that the battle flag and the MSG flag are slightly different shapes
- Tabbed?
- Changed to selected. Tabbed is informal dialectal English
- Bledsoe's Battery formed "was positioned"?
- Done
- Dry Wood Creek wound, wound "from" Dry Wood Creek
- Done
- artillery duel Battery I and Battery K missing word?
- Added
- Mix up cannon, guns and artillery pieces
- Done, where one was used in closish proximity
- No article on the Battle of Raymond? Or more detailed information?
- I'm confused here. I have Raymond linked in the lead and the prose, and there's five or six sentences on Raymond. Do I need to try to dredge up more on this battle?
- No, I just flat-out missed it and read it as part of the Battle of Jackson for some stupid reason. Though there is a related problem in the lede with battles of Raymond and Battle of Jackson. The problem is the repetition of battle. My preference is to use something like this: [[Battle of Raymond|Battles of Raymond]] and [[Battle of Jackson|Jackson]] but can make the link to the Battle of Jackson a bit of a surprise to the reader. So not entirely satisfactory, but maybe you can think of something else.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:39, 6 August 2020 (UTC)
- @Sturmvogel 66: I changed the piping on Jackson to remove the excess use of battle. Hog Farm Bacon 19:51, 6 August 2020 (UTC)
- But you forgot to capitalize battles--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:39, 6 August 2020 (UTC)
- Oops. Corrected.
- No, I just flat-out missed it and read it as part of the Battle of Jackson for some stupid reason. Though there is a related problem in the lede with battles of Raymond and Battle of Jackson. The problem is the repetition of battle. My preference is to use something like this: [[Battle of Raymond|Battles of Raymond]] and [[Battle of Jackson|Jackson]] but can make the link to the Battle of Jackson a bit of a surprise to the reader. So not entirely satisfactory, but maybe you can think of something else.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:39, 6 August 2020 (UTC)
- I'm confused here. I have Raymond linked in the lead and the prose, and there's five or six sentences on Raymond. Do I need to try to dredge up more on this battle?
- Sometimes you should characterize battles as either victories or defeats to help explain movements. Forex the opening of the 2nd para of the 1863 section should read "After the defeat at Jackson". This is not always necessary.
- Done this with Carthage, Jackson, Chickamauga, Resaca. I feel like most of the others are obvious, based on which army was repulsed/retreated.
- Clarify that the guns issued after the Battle of Jackson replaced the remaining original guns.
- Done
- losing all four cannons to capture awkward
- Done
- Suggest you replace the long list of individual battles in the infobox with the various campaigns.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 08:58, 5 August 2020 (UTC)
- @Sturmvogel 66: Hmmm. The battles prior to Raymond are in campaigns without articles. How do you think is the best to handle this? Hog Farm Bacon 18:44, 5 August 2020 (UTC)
- It would be fine to leave them as is since there isn't a campaign article, or you could create a red link to hypothetical campaign article(s) that might be worth thinking about doing.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:05, 5 August 2020 (UTC)
- I've simplified the ones where campaigns can be done. Someday, I'd like to write Operations to Control Missouri based on Template:Campaignbox Operations to Control Missouri, but that'll likely have to wait quite awhile.
- @Sturmvogel 66: - I've replied to all, although I do have a query on the Raymond one. Unfortunately, this one isn't going beyond GA, as I just don't have access to detailed-enough sources for the post-Chickamauga battles. Hog Farm Bacon 00:40, 6 August 2020 (UTC)
- I've simplified the ones where campaigns can be done. Someday, I'd like to write Operations to Control Missouri based on Template:Campaignbox Operations to Control Missouri, but that'll likely have to wait quite awhile.
- It would be fine to leave them as is since there isn't a campaign article, or you could create a red link to hypothetical campaign article(s) that might be worth thinking about doing.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:05, 5 August 2020 (UTC)
- @Sturmvogel 66: Hmmm. The battles prior to Raymond are in campaigns without articles. How do you think is the best to handle this? Hog Farm Bacon 18:44, 5 August 2020 (UTC)