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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:26, 29 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will review this article today! --K. Peake 07:26, 29 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Why isn't electronica listed under genres in the infobox?
  • I object to the ref in the infobox; write out it was also released under Columbia in the release section instead
  • WP:OVERLINK of Beyoncé under songwriters
  • Swap the release sentence with the production one, also cut this down to being who produced the song and when it was done
  • Make the celebration part the sentence directly after the release one, adding the genres at the start of it
  • "Critics noted the track's ability" → "Critics noted the song's ability"
  • Pipe police brutality to Police brutality in the United States
  • "also acting as an" → "also serving as an"
  • "The release of the single" → "The release of the song"
  • "with four nominations including" → "with four nominations, including"
  • Mention the commercial performance at the end of the lead

Background and production

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  • Any article to link 2020 Black Lives Matter Protests to?
  • Wikilink Kentucky Attorney General
  • Pipe Daniel Cameron to Daniel Cameron (American politician)
  • Pipe Breonna Taylor to Killing of Breonna Taylor
  • The sleeping part is not sourced
  • "urged Cameron to "take" → "urged Cameron, "Take"
  • "in charging the officers"." → "in charging the officers."" per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences
  • Img looks good!
  • Associated Press should not be italicised
  • Wikilink Derek Dixie, however this quote is not sourced
  • Quote box looks good!
  • Merge the third para with the second one per the overly short size
  • "on July 31 in order to capitalize off of it," → "on July 31, 2020. The simultaneous release could have been capitalize off of,"

Release

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  • Retitle to Release and promotion
  • Make this the section directly after comp
  • The first sentence also needs a citation to back up the release date of the song
  • The celebrating part from Beyoncé's quote is unsourced
  • Merge the third para with the second one per this also being promo

Composition

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  • Retitle to Composition and lyrics
  • Img looks good!
  • Consequence of Sound → Consequence, piping to Consequence (publication)
  • "brass bands [and]" → "brass bands, [and]"
  • "police brutality and the" → "police brutality, and the" but why are the protests linked here instead of earlier?
  • "her Texan roots as well as" → "her Texan roots, as well as"
  • Where is the Oshun part after Orishas sourced?
  • It is not sourced that Beyoncé sings these lyrics during the second verse
  • "Martin Luther King Jr. and her mother" → "Martin Luther King Jr., and her mother"
  • "noted that she pointed out the" → "noted that the singer points out the"

Critical reception

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  • "saying that "Black Parade" is" → "saying that 'Black Parade' is"
  • "family and past" and describing Beyoncé" → "family and past", and describing Beyoncé"
  • NPR should not be italicised
  • "of the George Floyd protests" → "of the Floyd protests"
  • "nation" as well as" → "nation", as well as"
  • "Afrodiasporic and African culture and history in the song, such as the George Floyd protests," → "Afrodiasporic, and African culture and history in the song, such as the Floyd protests,"
  • "in a full moon and the" → "in a full moon, and the"
  • "blackity, black, black" → "Blackity, Black, Black" per the source
  • Only use the surname Corcoran per an introduction already having been provided
  • BBC News should not be italicised
  • Only use the surname Wood per an intro already having been provided
  • "lyric in the song references" → "lyrics in the song reference"
  • "to Africa and grows despite" → "to Africa, growing despite" to avoid overusage of and
  • "lyric describes turning a" → "lyrics describe turning a"
  • Remove or replace the Forbes review per WP:FORBES
  • "describing how there is" → "Wood described how there is" as a new sentence, moving to the start of the below para instead
  • "however, he continues:" → "however, he continued:"
  • Pipe Complex to Complex (magazine) per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • ""We got rhythm, we got pride," at" → "'We got rhythm, we got pride,' at"
  • "party, as well"." → "party, as well."" per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences
  • "noting that Beyoncé" → "noting that she"

Year-end lists

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  • Remove or replace PopSugar since that is a gossip website
  • Either mention the name of the iHeartRadio author or write "with the staff describing..."
  • Be less repetitive rather than using named for every instance
  • "Consequence of Sound named the single the" → "Consequence named the single the"
  • "the 19th best song of 2020" → "the 19th best song of the year"
  • Either mention the name of the Stereogum reviewer or use the staff indentification
  • "lifetimes, "Parade" dually uplifted" → "lifetimes, 'Parade' dually uplifted"
  • HipHopDx → HipHopDX

Commercial performance

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  • "debuted on the U.S." → "debuted on the US"
  • "top 40 hit" → "top-40 hit"
  • "matching Michael Jackson." → "matching Michael Jackson's record."
  • "on the Digital Song Sales" → "on the US Digital Song Sales"
  • Shouldn't number-one in the context of an achievement always have a dash for consistency?
  • Mention the release year of "Single Ladies (Put a Ring on It)"
  • Use refnames to add the citations from the chart table for these positions

Awards and nominations

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  • ""Black Parade" won" → "The song won"
  • Pipe Grammy to Grammy Awards
  • "and now ties Frank Sinatra for the most nominated artist in this category in" → "and tied Frank Sinatra for the most in this category in" to be less wordy
  • Surround "after Pharrell Williams" with commas instead of brackets
  • Pipe "Savage Remix" to Savage (Remix) per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • "Beyoncé also became the" → "The singer also became the"
  • The Best R&B Song part is not sourced in prose
  • "making Beyoncé the most" → "making her the most"

Personnel

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  • Retitle to Credits and personnel
  • Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel
  • Pipe Brittany Coney and Denisia Andrews to Nova Wav, also why is there @ in their names here?

Charts

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  • Good

Certifications

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Release history

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  • Format → Format(s)
  • The release is not backed up as various for the first one

References

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  • Copyvio score looks relatively decent at 37.5%!
  • Archive all of these links by using the tool
  • Make sure date formatting is consistent, i.e D M, Y rather than Y-M-D and always do it in American format, etc.
  • Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 1 and cite YouTube as via instead
  • Cite CNN as publisher instead on ref 4
  • AP NEWS → Associated Press on ref 6 with the wikilink, citing as publisher instead
  • Ref 7 needs a proper URL and title, also cite Instagram as publisher instead with the wikilink
  • Wikilink NME on ref 8
  • Pipe Vox to Vox (website) on ref 9
  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 10 and pipe Complex to Complex (magazine) per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • Wikilink The Greenville News on ref 12
  • Wikilink Uproxx on ref 13 and uncapitalize it
  • Remove Apple Music from the title of ref 14 and cite it as publisher instead with the wikilink
  • Consequence of Sound → Consequence on ref 15, piping to Consequence (publication) and fixing MOS:QWQ issues
  • Wikilink The New York Times on ref 16 and author-link any of the ones that have their articles
  • Wikilink Los Angeles Times on refs 17 and 32
  • Cite BBC News on refs 18 and 30 as publisher instead with the wikilink only on the first instance
  • Cite TheGrio as publisher instead on ref 19 with the wikilink
  • idolator → Idolator on ref 23 and pipe to Idolator (website)
  • Cite Twitter in the via parameter on ref 24 with the wikilink
  • Pipe Time to Time (magazine) on ref 25
  • Cite NPR as publisher instead on refs 26 and 27 with the wikilink only on the first instance
  • Pipe Essence to Essence (magazine) on ref 28
  • Ref 29 is a duplicate of ref 15
  • ELLE → Elle on ref 31
  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 33
  • HYPEBEAST → Hypebeast on ref 34 and fix MOS:QWQ issues
  • Remove or replace ref 35 per it being a gossip website
  • Cite iHeartRadio as publisher instead on ref 36 with the wikilink
  • Pipe Glamour to Glamour (magazine) on ref 37
  • Consequence of Sound → Consequence on ref 38
  • Wikilink Stereogum on ref 40
  • Wikilink Rockdelux on ref 42
  • Wikilink HipHopDX on ref 43
  • Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 49
  • Pipe Vulture to Vulture.com on ref 50
  • Ref 51 is a duplicate of ref 8
  • Wikilink GoldDerby on ref 53
  • BET.com → BET on ref 55 with the wikilink, citing as publisher instead
  • Cite NAACP Image Awards as publisher instead on ref 57 with the wikilink and fix MOS:CAPS issues
  • Pipe Deadline to Deadline Hollywood on ref 58
  • Cite Tidal as publisher instead on ref 59 and remove it from the title
  • WP:OVERLINK of Australian Recording Industry Association on ref 60
  • Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 64
  • Rolling Stone charts → Rolling Stone on ref 71, with no wikilink
  • radiodate.it → Airplay Control on ref 73, citing as publisher instead

Final comments and verdict

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