Talk:Billy Elliot/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 09:48, 1 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

" British dance drama film" this is a WP:SEAOFBLUE. Doubtful of the utility of linking British or dance for our readers.
"earning £73 million (US$109.3 million) on a £3 million budget (US$5 million) worldwide." better as "earning £73 million (US$109.3 million) worldwide on a £3 million budget (US$5 million)."
Why are budgets in the infobox initially in $ whereas the lead has it initially in £ and it's a British movie?
- Figures are now given only in USD, as per their sources. I think we should just stick to USD, as providing the £ conversion now would just be an estimate. (I did take a look at 2015 British films and only USD is given.)
soup kitchen could be linked.
Don't link major geographical entities like London.
"Terraced homes used.." fragment, no full stop. If you added "were" between homes and used, keep the full stop.
Ellipsis needs non-breaking spaces either side.
"The BBC also financed" why "also"? And consider linking BBC.
" in total[5] before" nasty placement, move to after punctuation.
"On 3 June 1999..." whole para is unref.
- I was unable to find a source to cite any of that, so I've added a new paragraph of details.
Newcastle-upon-Tyne and Lynemouth are overlinked.
"Billy Elliot advert" italics for title of movie.
Also would make that "advertisement" for encyclopedic tone.
Dancer in the Dark has a small "i" for In.
"on Blu-ray Disc on" remove "Disc".
"...on 10 January 2012." unref.
"Roger Ebert gave the..." who is he?
"the BBC gave" you linked BBC this time, but in italics now?
Recipients in the table, would expect them to sort by surname.
- I've re-jiggled the recipients for each award, however, current structure is fine as Awards should be presented alphabetically (eg. Academy Awards first)
  - The names of the actors should sort by their surname. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 16:22, 3 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    - The Rambling Man Okay, but how can I do that without compromising the order of the Awards and their Categories? If I sort the entire table by surname, the awards will no longer be grouped and there would be a lot of repetition. Just Lizzy^(talk) 18:15, 3 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
      - Using {{sortname}}? The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 18:19, 3 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
        I see thanks, I've added sortname to the actors and this now sorts it by surname. Just Lizzy^(talk) 11:34, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"reviews[53] and ran " move that ref to end.
Ref titles shouldn't be using spaced hyphens, they should use spaced en-dashes.
No SHOUTING in ref titles.
Consistent formatting of things like Rotten Tomatoes (italics or no?)
- Rotten Tomatoes, Metacritic, CinemaScore and BBC don't need italics, but all other media publications do. (example, see Mulholland Drive)
  - But your usage in the article and references is inconsistent. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 16:23, 3 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    - I've resolved the one for BBC. I can't control the italics in the references, however. Hoping the rest is okay now. Just Lizzy^(talk) 18:15, 3 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
      - Sure you can. Either chose work (italics) or publisher (not italics). But consistency is needed. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 18:19, 3 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
      - I've updated them again in article and refs, and should be consistent now. Just Lizzy^(talk) 11:34, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
BAFTA awards refs need better titles.

That's enough for a first pass, so I'll put it on hold while we deal with these. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 14:53, 1 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for the review! I've addressed all the above comments, and replied to some of them. I've also done a cleanup of the prose, thanks Just Lizzy^(talk) 16:13, 3 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lizzy150 responded to a couple of those. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 16:23, 3 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Okeydokes, happy with this now meeting GA criteria. Well done, promoting. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:35, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]