Talk:Big King/GA1

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 05:46, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Hi, I will take this one. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 05:46, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 Done Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 11:55, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• Can we link hamburger? Looks like an important link for this article

 Fixed - 10:32, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• Could the article be more illustrated? For example, with images related to the two companies?

 Working - See what I can do. Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 10:39, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

 Fixed -Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 11:16, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Initial product run

 Done Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 18:04, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• The company's take on the well-known You have not mentioned Burger King yet in the main text. Link it as well - links repeated from the lead are not a problem

 Fixed -10:37, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• Link McDonald's

 Fixed -10:37, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• where rival McDonald's I think the "rival" fact should be mentioned when you first introduce McDonald's. This is its second mention

 Fixed -10:37, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• Could we link "caloric content?

 Question: - To what? Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 10:37, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

May be to food energy? Calorie covers it only as a unit. Linking is not necessary, just an idea. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 10:43, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

 Fixed -17:19, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• Italics for "Chicago Tribune"?

 Fixed -10:37, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• newer sandwich's ingredients were of better quality than the McDonald's product --> ingredients of the newer sandwich were of better quality than those of the McDonald's product.

 Fixed -10:38, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

BK Stackers

 Done Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 11:55, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• Stacker sauce served on a sesame seed bun "sesame seed bun" is mentioned in the earlier section, it should be linked only there

 Fixed 11:15, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• Chowhound.com readers rated the Quad Stacker How reliable is this website? What exactly is it for?

 Comment: - Chowhound is food and restaurant review site run by American media company CBS Interactive.

• the Impulsive Buy What is this?

 Comment: - The Impulsive Buy is a long running review blog that focuses on fast food. It has been running for more than a decade now. about -Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 11:15, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• in the three months ended Sept. 30 I have generally seen months written in full words.

 Fixed 11:15, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• didn't scale at the same rate as increasing numbers "didn't" may be expanded

 Fixed 11:15, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

I'm going to bed now, finish later -Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 11:26, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

BK Toppers

 Done Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 18:04, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• The BK Toppers line was a line of cheeseburgers introduced in October 2011 Please add the company name when you begin a section

 Fixed -17:28, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• The 1st para is unsourced

 Fixed -11:28, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• Could "sauteed mushrooms" be linked?

 Comment: According to the guidelines on wikilinking, common terms such as mushrooms should not be linked unless there is compelling reason to do so. However, I will link sauteing as some people may be unfamiliar with the term. --Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 17:28, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Thanks. That will do. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 18:04, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• beyond the 18- to 34-year-old demographic This wording looks better than the "young men aged 20–34 " from the previous section

 Fixed -17:28, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Reintroduction

 Done Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 18:12, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• Could "chicken strips" be linked?

 Fixed -17:38, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• A chicken variant introduced in May 2014. Should "was" be added or is something missing?

 Fixed -17:38, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• Link Middle East

 Fixed -17:38, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• because of a new approach by the company was taking regarding new and LTO products Is it a typo or is something missing? LTO should be explained here, not in the next section.

 Comment: - the term was explained in the lead, however I did not define the term in the body of the article. --Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 17:38, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

I see. Better. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 18:12, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• Say either reintroduction or re-introduction

 Fixed -17:38, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• The idea of reintroducing older, possibly discontinued products is appealing to companies ... their kitchen operations. Could be shortened and/or reworded so that it looks like original research and does not deviate from the main topic.

 Comment: - The sentence is a run-on, I fixed that. I don't understand what you mean by OR. --Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 17:43, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Better. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 18:12, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Competitive products

 Done Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 18:13, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• I think this section repeats some facts from the earlier sections (like the Big Mac), could it be merged into them?

 Not fixed - the opening sentence is the only part that restates the Big Mac connection, and it states this to acknowledge the earlier statement before expanding on other products from vendors other than McDonald's that compete with the Big King.

Oh, I see. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 18:13, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• Whopper is a duplink

 Fixed -17:51, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Product description

 Done Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 18:14, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• This section could be renamed simply as "Description"

 Not fixed - This is a standard format for these articles. Please see other, similar articles such as Whopper and BK Chicken Fries. --Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 18:04, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Sorry, didn't know. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 18:14, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• Duplinks: beef, sesame seed, bun

 Fixed -18:04, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• No bold is needed in this section. Bold is generally not used in the article but I believe it should be kept in the earlier sections for the sake of emphasis; but it is not so important here. You may use bullets instead

 Not fixed - See comment above. --Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 18:04, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• The plan was part of Burger King CEO, Alex Macedo What does this mean?

 Fixed - bad wording, I fixed it. --Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 18:04, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• 1/2 pound double Burger King Convert?

 Fixed -18:04, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

• The Mushroom & Swiss Big King This has an image here. Where is this burger discussed?

 Fixed -I expanded the description of the image to tie it into the section. --Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 18:04, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Advertising

 Done Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 08:44, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

• Link Ammirati Puris Lintas at first mention

 Not fixed - no article on English Wikipedia, changed to parent group interpublic. -Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 07:40, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

• were the result of the of comparatively strong sales year in 1996 Errors?

 Fixed -07:40, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

• a national TV program from Ammirati Puris Lintas Say television

 Fixed -07:40, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

• that debuted on September 1st. Mention the year

 Comment: - the year is mentioned in the section header. --Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 07:40, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

• except it's got 75 percent more beef Say % or percent throughout the article

 Fixed -07:40, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

• The 30 second ads were for both the King dash?

 Fixed -07:40, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

• The British and German ad program for a limited time offering (LTO) Don't explain LTO again

 Fixed -07:40, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

• was not translated into German Link German

 Fixed -07:40, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

See also

 Done Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 08:44, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

• "See also" is not needed, the links are already there in the article.

 Comment: - I prefer to keep the section as some people do not follow the wikilinks within the article, but instead opt to do so after reading it. --Jeremy (blah blah • I did it!) 08:27, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

Sources

 Done Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 08:44, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

• Ref. 1: I think it is "Advertising Age"

 Fixed -07:45, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

• Ref. 5, 22, 37, 42, 52, 53, 54, 56, 57, 58, 59 Italics for newspaper/agency name?

 Fixed -07:52, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

• Are Refs. 24, 25, 31, 38, 61 reliable enough?

 Comment: -08:06, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

• 24 & 31 - QSR Web is a industry business site that focuses on the fast food industry. I have used it in several other GA-class articles without issue.
• 25 - The Consumerist is the blog arm of Consumers Union, parent company of Consumer Reports. CU is a highly respected, non-profit consumer's advocate group in the US.
• 38 - the Motley Fool is a well respected multimedia financial-services company.
• 61 - A prospectus is a legal document that is filed with the U.S. Securities and Exchange Commission each year. As a federally required, legal document it is considered reliable.

• Refs. 44, 45 need proper formatting

 Fixed

@Jerem43: I am satisfied with your replies. The article looks much better now and meets all the GA criteria. I am happy to promote this. It was a great pleasure to work with you. This review is very interesting due to all the colorful icons used! Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 08:44, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

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