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Reviewer: Sauloviegas (talk · contribs) 06:58, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

This article needs A LOT of work and I was about to fail before the review, but let's see what we can do... - Saulo Talk to Me 10:32, 9 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

First look through

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Infobox

  • It says that the genres are R&B, hip hop, drum and bass. However, in composition we read "influenced by the 1990s hip hop and R&B" and "drum'n'bass breakdown." The genre usually applies to the entire song. For an example, Hold It Against Me has a dubstep breakdown, but the song's genre is dance-pop. Urban pop is not a genre. And remember, influenced does not mean that the track belongs to that genre also. I suggest you find a better source for the genre and then add it to the infobox.

Lead

  • is a song by Canadian recording artist Nelly Furtado, released on April 17, 2012 as the lead single from Furtado's fifth studio album, The Spirit Indestructible. → is a song by Canadian recording artist Nelly Furtado, taken from her fifth studio album, The Spirit Indestructible. It was released on April 17, 2012, through Interscope Records, as the lead single from the album.
  • The song was written by Furtado, was co-written and produced by Rodney "Darkchild" Jerkins, → The song was written by Furtado, while production and additional lyrics were done by Rodney "Darkchild" Jerkins
  • The lyrics discuss Furtado's life as a teenager, describing her enjoyment of parties, hip hop and R&B music, and the emotions she experienced through the music. "Big Hoops" received mixed reviews from music critics; many praised the song's breakdown, but some criticized Furtado's vocals. → The track's lyrics refer to the singer's life as a teenager, describing her passion to hip hop and R&B music at that time. "Big Hoops (Bigger the Better)" received mixed reviews from music critics, who praised the song's breakdown, but criticized Furtado's vocals.
  • Don't forget to link music critics, R&B, and hip hop.
  • It failed to enter the Billboard Hot 100 chart, but charted on Billboard's Pop Songs and Hot Dance Club Songs charts. → "Big Hoops (Bigger the Better)" did not make impact in the United States, failing to chart on Billboard Hot 100. However, it chated within the top forty on the Pop Songs component chart, while reaching the top ten on Hot Dance Club Songs.
  • The music video was released on May 3, 2012 and it features hula hoops, dancers and Furtado walking on stilts. → The accompanying music video was directed by Little X, and features Furtado sttruting down a city block wearing a giant pair of stilts, as she is joined by dancers throughout the video.

COMMENTS

Tried to solve the things above. See if they're done, and keep on as you like it. igordebraga ≠ 05:34, 10 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

  • Add this right after the video info: To promote the song, Furtado performed it on Alan Carr: Chatty Man, at the 2012 Billboard Music Awards and the 2012 MuchMusic Video Awards.

Background

  • was one of the first songs that Nelly Furtado → was one of the first songs that Furtado
  • Add source after "worked on with producer Rodney Jerkins for The Spirit Indestructible."
  • Poorly worded, rephrase this bit: "The lyrics concerned her teenage life, particularly "this wonderful R&B and hip hop music that I listened to [that] became ... part of my lifestyle." Furtado's lyrics reference her favourite R&B and hip hop groups"
  • Hip hop group Odd Future was cited as an influence upon the song's style; Furtado said she was inspired by the group's "dark sound[ing], heavy and visceral", and tried to put similar qualities on "Big Hoops". → Furtado revealed she was inspired by the "dark ..., heavy and visceral" sound of hip hop group Odd Future, as she tried to recreate a similar sound on "Big Hoops (Bigger the Better)".

Composition

  • A 30 second sample → the sample is only lasts for 19 seconds. Fix this.
  • "Big Hoops (Bigger the Better)" was written by Furtado and Rodney Jerkins, and was produced by Jerkins. → "Big Hoops (Bigger the Better)" was written by Furtado, with production and additional lyrics being provided by Rodney "Darkchild" Jerkins.
  • It is an R&B song featuring hip hop beats, staccato percussion and Furtado’s Auto-Tuned voice. → The R&B song infuses hip hop beats and staccato percussion on its instrumentation,(add source) while Robbie Daw of Idolator noticed the use of pitch-correcting software Auto-Tune on Furtado's vocals.(add source)
  • Furtado stated that the song's sound was influenced by the 1990s hip hop and R&B as a tribute to the music she listened to in her teenage years. → This is already cited on Background section. Most of the info there is about the song's composition, so I suggest merging both and creating a section titled Background and composition, with one paragraph for the Background and one for the Composition (see these GAs for examples: Lucky, Stronger. I'll review the section after is merged to check if there is no conflicting info.

Release

  • In March 2012, Nelly Furtado announced that "Big Hoops (Bigger the Better)" would be released in April.[10] The song was released via digital download on April 17, 2012,[11] and was released physically in Germany on May 18.[12] → This should be moved to the Background paragraph
  • In May 2012 Nelly performed "Big Hoops" on UK show Alan Carr: Chatty Man.[13] Furtado performed the song for the first time in the US during the 2012 Billboard Music Awards on May 20, 2012,[14] and in Canada during the 2012 MuchMusic Video Awards on June 17, 2012.[15] → Create a new section below Music video titled Live performances and move it there. Example: Something New.

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Release

The song debuted at number sixty on the Canadian Hot 100 chart and peaked at number twenty-eight. It debuted at number forty-six on the Belgian Tip Chart, where it reached a peak of number twenty-four. On the Dutch singles chart, the song debuted at number 81 and peaked at 26th. On the UK Singles Chart, the song debuted at number fourteen, becoming the song's highest chart peak, and the song became Furtado's highest charting single since 2006's All Good Things (Come to an End). On the North American Billboard charts, the song became Furtado's first since 2010's "Night Is Young" to not enter the Billboard Hot 100.

Music video

  • The music video → The accompanying music video
  • including Tony Duncan → who is Tony Duncan? Is he known by the public? I suggest the removal of this, as we don't cite the name of dancers unless they are highly known from a music program or a TV show.
  • Two alternate videos were produced: a "lyrics" video[29] and a "Home Made" video, directed by Aaron A and filmed in a parking lot on Sunset Boulevard during the production of The Spirit Indestructible's album artwork. → This should be moved after the reviews of the video, to avoid confusion. Check Gimme More and 3 for examples.

Live performances

  • This is not a subsection, remove it from music video and create its own separate section using = = Live performances = = (remove the spaces) instead of = = = Live performances = = =
  • In May 2012 Nelly performed "Big Hoops" on UK show Alan Carr: Chatty Man.[32] Furtado performed the song for the first time in the US during the 2012 Billboard Music Awards on May 20, 2012,[33] and in Canada during the 2012 MuchMusic Video Awards on June 17, 2012.[34] It is part of her setlist on The Spirit Indestructible Tour, which started on Furtado's hometown, Victoria, on January 2013.[35] → Rephrase. Do not use Nelly, and avoid using Furtado, Furtado, Furtado, like you did. Try something like, "In May 2012, Furtado performed "Big Hoops (Bigger the Better)" in the United Kingdom on TV show Alan Carr: Chatty Man. The singer also performed it in the United States during the 2012 Billboard Music Awards, held on May 20, 2012, and in Canada during the 2012 MuchMusic Video Awards on June 12, 2012. The song was also included on the setlist of The Spirit Indescrutible Tour."
  • There is no need for this bit "which started on Furtado's hometown, Victoria, on January 2013"

Credits and personnel

  • Add spaces between these: — . Like this: Nelly Furtado — lyrics

Chart performance

Release dates

  • Retitle to Release history

References

COMMENTS - 3

See if all was done. igordebraga ≠ 05:12, 16 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Second look through

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I'm going to check the article once more section per section to see if it will pass or not. - Saulo Talk to Me 11:51, 16 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

  • Genre is R&B only. Remove hip-hop, Drum and bass

Lead

  • Link lead single
  • "Big Hoops" has an urban pop sound influenced by hip hop and R&B music from the 1990s. → "Big Hoops (Bigger the Better)" is a R&B song influenced by hip hop collective Odd Future and 1990s productions.
  • The song was moderately successful on the charts, reaching the top thirty in the United Kingdom, Canada, The Netherlands and Belgium. → The song achieved moderate commercial success, reaching the top thirty in Belgium, Canada, Netherlands and United Kingdom.
  • "Big Hoops" did not make impact in the United States, failing to chart on the Billboard Hot 100 chart. However, it chated within the top forty on the Pop Songs and omponent chart, while reaching the top ten on Hot Dance Club Songs. → In the United States, "Big Hoops (Bigger the Better)" failed to ented the Billboard Hot 100, however, it charted within the top forty on Pop Songs and reached the top ten on Hot Dance Club Songs.

Background

  • Furtado stated that the song's sound was influenced by the 1990s hip hop and R&B as a tribute to the music she listened to in her teenage years. Furtado also stated that she was inspired by hip hop group Odd Future's "dark sound[ing], heavy and visceral" as she tried to recreate a similar sound on "Big Hoops (Bigger the Better)". → The singer stated that the song's instrumentation was influenced by the 1990s hip hop and R&B as a tribute to the music she listened to in her teenage years, also citing inspiration from hip hop group Odd Future's "dark ... heavy and visceral" sound as she tried to recreate a similar style on "Big Hoops (Bigger the Better)".
  • The lyrics of "Big Hoops" → The lyrics of "Big Hoops (Bigger the Better)"

Composition

  • not contained versus a structured typical song." add reference after quotes

Release and reception

  • Smith declared that "Big Hoops (The Bigger the Better)" → Smith declared that "Big Hoops (Bigger the Better)"
  • "really about chart positions" add reference after quotes
  • Furtado stated that "Big Hoops" → Furtado stated that the song
  • The song was released → It was released
  • on May 18 → On May 18, 2012

Critical reception

  • has received mixed to favourable reviews → Be consistent here. The lead says mixed reviews only. Checking through the reviews, I suggest you to change in the lead from "mixed reviews from music critics" to "mixed to positive reviews from music critics".
  • "[Furtado] makes an even clearer distinction between herself and Rihanna singing, 'I don't wanna talk about sex, wanna express myself tonight.'" add reference after quotes
  • considering that "Big Hoops" → "Big Hoops (Bigger the Better)"
  • Robbie Daw wrote a mixed review for Idolator, criticized "the singer’s unnecessary Rihanna-esque vocal delivery" and wrote that the song "isn’t the strongest lead single we’ve heard from an album." → Robbie Daw of Idolator gave the song a mixed review, criticizing the singer's "unnecessary Rihanna-esque vocal delivery" while adding that it "isn't the strongest lead single we've heard from an album."
  • Jessica Sager from "Pop Crush" gave the single 0.5 out of 5 stars, comparing her vocals on the song to a → Jessica Sager of Pop Crush rated it 0.5 out of 5 stars, comparing Furtado's vocals to the ones of a
  • She also wrote that "Furtado wants → Sager also noted that the singer "wants
  • Melinda Newman from HitFix wrote that "It’s a meaningless → Melinda Newman of Hitfix deemed the song "a meaningless

References

  • Do not style the citeweb references like this MTV News (MTV Networks). They are supposed to be like MTV News. MTV Networks. Template Citenews add brackets because the source is a newspaper. Fix all of these, and there are publishers missing also, such as in a few Billboard references.

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Done... though I skipped "add ref after quotes" isn't done because the text after the quote is also covered by the same reference. igordebraga ≠ 01:25, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Seems good. You just need to fix the other references, there are still issues in many of them such as Ref 12 (it's not (Apple, Inc) it's Apple Inc only), Ref 13 (Amazon.com should not be italicized), Ref 23 should not be in brackets also, etc. - Saulo Talk to Me 01:44, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

See if that does it, and if anything else was left. igordebraga ≠ 12:39, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll fix the few references that are left myself. - Saulo Talk to Me 18:32, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Passing. - Saulo Talk to Me 18:41, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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