Talk:Beware of the Dog (Millennium)/GA1

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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 15:08, 19 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Issues

General

No dab links. Great work!
No dead links. Great work!

Infobox

Is there a possible non-free image to add?
Not sure one would be able to meet WP:NFCC; nothing concrete enough to be illustrated by one frame is mentioned in secondary sources and the major plot points (dogs, old man, dogs again) are readily imaginable through words alone. There is a free image breaking up the text already. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Add "running time"
Done. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
References for "Guest stars"?
Don't have a secondary source for it but the episode itself credits them, serving as its own source (though it need not be specifically cited as it's needlessly circular to cite the subject of its own article). GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Lede

Unlink United States per WP:OVERLINK (Television in the United States would be same)
Removed. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
An episode can't really "premiered" how about "originally aired, first aired, etc."
Addressed below. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"When offender profiler Frank Black (Lance Henriksen) investigates several killings by a pack of savage dogs, he discovers a strange old man who teaches him more than he ever knew about the Millennium Group." Perhaps "The show centers on X. In this episode, offender profiler Frank Black (Lance Henriksen) investigates several killings by a pack of savage dogs, he discovers a strange old man who teaches him more than he ever knew about the Millennium Group
Done. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
critics → television critics
Added. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Plot

Link Los Angeles
Done. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Unlink pickup truck per WP:OVERLINK
Left that one in, it might be a common enough term in some countries but between the engvar differences and the scarcity of the actual vehicle in many places (Europe mostly uses vans for the same purpose and pickups are rare) I think a link here is useful as an explanatory aid. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Link Seattle
Done. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Production

"The episode was Coulter's first work on the series" how about: "The episode was Coulter's first credit in the series"
Done. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Unlink casting director per WP:OVERLINK
Done. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Broadcast and reception

"first broadcast" → originally aired" per the above
Done, for whatever difference it makes. 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)
"The episode earned a Nielsen rating of 6.5 during its original broadcast, meaning that 6.5 percent of households in the United States viewed the episode. This represented approximately 6.37 million households, and left the episode the sixty-ninth most-viewed broadcast that week". Rewrite: "The episode's initial broadcast was viewed by approximately 6.37 million households, making it the sixty-ninth most-viewed episode that week. "Beware of the Dog" earned a Nielsen rating of 6.5, with a X share, meaning that roughly 6.5 percent of all television-equipped households, and X percent of households watching television, were tuned in to the episode". X should be the episode's Nielsen share
Mentioned below, have no information on share to add. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Try to add UK airing
Again, no source for this. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
critics → television critics
Done. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"rated the episode a B+", how about: "gave the episode a "B+"
Done. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
The A.V. Club's Zack Handlen rated the episode a B+, finding it "endearingly batshit". should be ref after, although its below
Duplicated the ref after the quote. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
There are way to many uses of the word "rated" perhaps something else for some
One instance changed per above; another changed to "awarded". GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Notes

"1997–1998 television season" should be "1997–98 television season" per WP:YEAR
Done. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Footnotes

Should to "Fox Broadcasting Company", not "corporation"
Done. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ref. 3: Boston Herald is missing publisher (Herald Media Inc.)
Done. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ref. 3: Should just be Boston Herald
Done. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ref. 4: Variety is missing publisher (Reed Business Information)
Done. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ref. 5: The Honolulu Advertiser is missing publisher (Black Press)
Done. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ref. 11: Rocky Mountain News is missing publisher (Denver Newspaper Agency). Note: actuall owner is E. W. Scripps Company, but the original publisher is "Denver"
Done. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ref. 12: ""Redux, Part 2"/"Beware of the Dog" | The X-Files/Millennium | TV Club". Should only be named "Redux, Part 2"/"Beware of the Dog"
Not done, I'm not sure what dropping information here is meant to accomplish. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ref. 12: The A.V. Club is missing publisher (The Onion)
Done. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ref. 13: DVD Talk is missing publisher (Internet Brands)
Done. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ref. 14: Star Tribune is missing publisher (The Star Tribune Company)
Done. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Book ref.s should have last name then first name as in second book source. First one needs fixing
- Comment I believe the first "book source" is a DVD feature.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 21:41, 19 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Indeed it is. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

External links

Is missing an "External links" section. As a short article, it is much needed. Add The X-Files Wiki, IMDb, X-Files.com, and TV.com episode links.
Added the three that I could. GRAPPLE X 03:42, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

On hold. Great work! TBran dl ey 15:40, 19 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'm working on something at the minute but I will get to this hopefully this evening. For what it's worth there'll be no X-Files.com material for this, as it's not The X-Files (loosely described as a spin-off, but not really covered by the same site); and premiere can be used as a verb, denoting the first broadcast or screening of something (cf/ Squeeze (The X-Files) for similar usage). There's also no reliable source for a Nielson share, just the rating (the top few broadcasts have full ratings information but as the list goes on it simply gives a rank and a rating). Same goes for UK broadcasts; I genuinely have no idea where or even if it broadcast outside of the US. GRAPPLE X 21:57, 19 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Will pass the article. Congrats! TBran dl ey 03:54, 22 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]