Talk:Betty (Adventure Time)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Quenhitran (talk · contribs) 09:34, 21 June 2014 (UTC)

I'll take up this one. Everything seems solid, so I presume that it won't take long.

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

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General template, specific comments follow.

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

ALittleQuenhi (talk to me) 09:43, 21 June 2014 (UTC)

Further comments

• Last sentence of lead section: the word "episode" was used repeatedly, which doesn't sound natural. Can you fix it?

  They have been cut down.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 03:44, 22 June 2014 (UTC)

• "Events" subheading: "both are voiced by Tom Kenny" => both were voiced/both voiced?

  Fixed.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 03:44, 22 June 2014 (UTC)

• "As such, he wants to create a portal to the past and apologize to his fiancée Betty for making her leave him; Hambo, filled with sentimentality, is the key to the portal." I'm not sure if the semicolon works in this case. Split it into two sentences may help, I guess, or use another linking.

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 03:44, 22 June 2014 (UTC)

• What does this mean: "Maurice LaMarche also reprises his recurring role as Grand Master Wizard; he also voices Belle Noche"? Perhaps this needs some other linking words.

  I tried to make this a little clearer. He voices a recurring character, and a new character.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 03:45, 22 June 2014 (UTC)

• Reliable sources: you use a number of Tumblr, Twitter and Instagram posts as sources without "verfied" marks. For a GA to be passed it's not necessary, but you are encouraged to replace it with alternatives whenever possible.

  Well, a good chunk of those sources (the Instagram and Twitter) are from Jesse Moynihan, and are even linked on his website (www.jessemoynihan.com). The Tumblr is the official production crew Tumblr. Does Tumblr do the 'verified' thing?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 03:44, 22 June 2014 (UTC)

That's it. I've done some minor fixes by myself. ALittleQuenhi (talk to me) 10:08, 21 June 2014 (UTC)

Great, GA now!