Talk:Betsy Head Park/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: ArnabSaha (talk · contribs) 15:03, 27 April 2021 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it well written?

   A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

   B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:

2. Is it verifiable with no original research?

   A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

   B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:

   C. It contains no original research:

   D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

   B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):

4. Is it neutral?

   It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:

5. Is it stable?

   It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:

6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Comments

• Expand the lead. Seems short w.r.t the article size.
  •  Done
• "6 a.m. to 1 a.m." add timezone.
  • Since this is local time, rather than something that happens at a specific fixed time in history, I think a time zone may be redundant. Generally, this uses Eastern Time Zone or Eastern Daylight Time depending on the time of year. However, these operating hours are only relevant for the local time each day, if you get what I mean. Epicgenius (talk) 21:26, 27 April 2021 (UTC)
• "filtration facilities, and proposed" - Comma not necessary (not sure as USen)
  •  Fixed I have rephrased this now. Epicgenius (talk) 21:26, 27 April 2021 (UTC)
• "without any ceremony and without the mayor" - omit 2nd without
  •  Done
• "500 feet (150 m) long ... 720 feet (220 m) long" - 1st long can be omitted.
  •  Done
• "500 feet (150 m) long on ... and 200 feet (61 m) long" = same here.
  •  Done
• "hundred children spread news" - the news
  •  Done
• "facilities were funded by Head's estate" - the Head's estate.
  • In this case, "Head" is a singular proper noun, referring to the lady named Betsy Head. I have reworded that. Epicgenius (talk) 21:26, 27 April 2021 (UTC)
• Any other details regarding "Whirlpooling"?
  • Sadly no. It was a pattern of harassment in the 1990s that died out afterward. Epicgenius (talk) 21:26, 27 April 2021 (UTC)
• Add current photos, if available.
  • I will request photos of this park. Epicgenius (talk) 21:26, 27 April 2021 (UTC)
• Current status of work that commenced in 2019?
  •  Added The work was completed last month, actually. Many of the older sporting fields have been totally replaced, but the pool area wasn't changed at all. I have updated this accordingly. Epicgenius (talk) 21:26, 27 April 2021 (UTC)

These are the issues I mainly found. Otherwise the article is good. No issues found while spot checking citations.  Saha ❯❯❯ Stay safe  18:44, 27 April 2021 (UTC)

@ArnabSaha: Thanks for the review. I've addressed all of these comments. Epicgenius (talk) 21:26, 27 April 2021 (UTC)

Passed  Saha ❯❯❯ Stay safe  03:28, 28 April 2021 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.