Talk:Bethann Siviter/startup editing comments - no longer contextual

This was archived because it is no longer relevant: the page has been established, and because the article has changedm the comments about what needs to be changed no longer mathces the content, but out of respect for those who helped I have saved information here. Thank you for helping me- this is the first time I have done something like this on Wiki and found the community very supportive. NurseUK (talk) 23:50, 18 December 2007 (UTC)

Bethann is someone that student nurses would like to know more about. I have had a specific request from others at my Uni (because I have had more contact with Bethan than most other students) to help set up a page with content and links provided by other contributors (and I checked the info with her, although I didnt say I was about to Wiki her).

I think I fixed the intro: thank you very much for the practical advice! I use Wiki all the time but never put anything in before. Its hard to figure out excactly what you need to do even when you read the instructions. I hope they agree the page is ok and that Bethann is as worthy of this as we "her" students believe she is. Is what I put enough or do I need to put more? Should I put some of the more subjective information as above or is that best left out? I only put it here to show what other information is there, and am willing to delete anything. I am not sure based on guidelines if its okay or not. NurseUK (talk) 07:22, 9 December 2007 (UTC)

• Please follow the instructions given on the "Deletion" tag found on the article if you wish to dispute the deletion. Main problem is that you are not really discussing the importance or notability of the subject. Why she is important. Her contributions to nursing. etc. will381796 (talk) 07:26, 9 December 2007 (UTC)

I think I am now following the directions- can you give more direct advice? I outline all her achievements. It says her contributions. It says why she is important. Can you give me any more advice? Thank you! (This answer was typed in later, there had been another answer, but I fixed the page after the second comment... I hope the first person can help me more. Thank you!NurseUK (talk) 07:36, 10 December 2007 (UTC))

• My advice is to fix the intro. Right now, the first two paragraphs portray her as just an ordinary nurse, whereas the third paragraph explains that she is a prominent author in the nursing field. You've got to get her claim to notability into the first sentence and continuing from there. --Metropolitan90 (talk) 09:22, 9 December 2007 (UTC)

Thank you for your direct and specific advice- as a result, I have expanded the first paragraph. When I asked Bethann if it was okay to highlight her "on a website" she said only if I didn't put a halo on her and make a big deal. I was trying to be as modest and objective as possible. It's hard to get it right between the two: modest but obvious. Again thank you, NurseUK (talk) 07:36, 10 December 2007 (UTC)