Talk:Bestia Salvaje/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:18, 8 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Delink Mexico per MOS:OVERLINK
"A second-generation wrestler, he was the son of Espectro II and the brother of Corazón Salvaje as well as the brother-in-law of Charrito de Oro." - he was the son of Espectro II, the brother of Corazón Salvaje and the brother-in-law of Charrito de Oro
Try not to put citations in the lead per MOS:CITELEAD and put it in the body of the article at the appropriate place

"Bestia Salvaje defeated Águila Solitaria to win the Mexican National Welterweight Championship, the first championship of his career." - title
"("bet match" hair vs. hair match," - the second parentheses is needed here
"After the team broke up," - disbanded is more formal

"becoming the sixth overall championship team." - winning
"Los Chacales' reign as CMLL World Trios Champions lasted almost a year, 357 days," - lasted 357 days,
"Bestia Salvaje teamed up with Chicago Express defeating Dos Caras and Bronco, El Hijo del Santo and Olímpico, and Atlantis and Atlantico in the tournament finals to win the tournament." - repetition of the word "tournament"
"before being eliminated by the Great Sasuke in the semi-finals." - The Great Sasuke

"During the match it looked like El Felino turned on his brother," - appeared that
"allowing Bestia Salvaje and Scorpio Jr. to beat up Negro Casas." - defeat
"El Felino pulled his mask off," - removed his mask,
"on November 13, 1998." - the period is not needed here
"in a tournament." - which tournament?
"which lead to a match on February 5, 1999" - led
"Casas and Hijo del Santo won the match by disqualification and thus the championship as well, but refused to accept the belts due to how the match ended." - repetition of the word "match"

"In the following months," - please state if possible how many months exactly
"and looked down on anyone who was not as handsome as he was." - despite those who were less handsome than him.
"2000 Shocker was invited to work" - In 2000, Shocker
"Over the following months," - how many months preciesly?
"without a partner for Trios matches, their solution was to bring in another veteran Emilio Charles Jr. to become the fourth Guapo team member," - the two commas should be replaced by separate period and the word "their" begin with a capital letter
"forcing Charles to have all his hair shaved off as a result of his loss." - because he lost. for variety

"A month later he defeated Cyborg in a Lucha de Apuestas match, leaving Cyborg bald as a result." - repetition of "Cyborg"

Reference 2 needs to be archived or replaced
The publisher of reference 17 should be changed from Super Luchas Magazine to Súper Luchas and made the work and not the publisher
Reference 34 is missing the author

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 08:57, 9 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

MWright96 I believe I have addressed all issues, incuding trying to be as specific as I can whenever I knew the exact time. MPJ-DK (talk) 02:21, 10 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- @MPJ-DK: Now promoting to GA class. I have made a minor change to the prose. MWright96 (talk) 08:04, 10 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]