Talk:Best Sex I've Ever Had/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 15:49, 19 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"that the couple were no longer together" mildly confusing as to which couple this is referring.
"the New York Daily News were " overlinked.
" by Liz Smith that" likewise.
"bitches...I " non-breaking space before the ellipsis and a regular space after the ellipsis.
Apply to other ellipses in the article.
""...before" but in this case, it's a non-breaking space after the ellipsis!
Could link column inch.
New York Times is The New York Times.
"the New York Post reporter" previously you abbreviated this to Post. Be consistent.
"accompany the headline" (or close variants) appears three times in three sentences, bit repetitive.
"ABC, CBS, NBC, Fox and CNN " you linked all the newspapers, I imagine it's not unreasonable to link all these broadcasters.
"headline, Maples" odd punctuation, maybe a colon/semi-colon, but not a comma.

That's all I have for now. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 09:19, 20 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I've incorporated all of your suggested improvements. Many thanks! No Swan So Fine (talk) 22:09, 20 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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